Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-10-17

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Nowdays, people think that accecpt a bad situation, like job otherside the shortage of money and argur about it that better to try and improve this situations . From my perspective a person can work hard to make money and change their own time with their skills of working so the situations will be automathics updated day by day.

On The One Hand, people believe that people should accept every bad situation like unsatisfactory job and shortage of money so this will right thing to accept every worst situation and job unsatisfactory because some people don't have qualifications so it is better to job in a unsatisfactory job so the person get knowledge about the value of qualificatins and put their own child to school and university's so they have a better future for them and the parents of them have the experiane of woking under the boss and how it feels to them when they were working under their boss.

On The Other Side, people think to do better and improve such situations like shortage of money. If a person is hard working then the person will definatly change the situation of their family and the problems they are facing like shortage of money so, if the person is working hard so the person will never faces problems related to money or anything else.

My Conclusion, From my perspective people can work hard to become succesfull in life so the person will never face problems like shortage of money in precent or in future they can build there whole career if the person is honest and hard working. Success need silent work example:- Education is the key of success

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You address both views and state a preference for working to improve one’s circumstances, particularly in the opening and conclusion. The discussion of accepting a poor situation includes a relevant point about people lacking qualifications gaining work experience, but the link to educating their children is not clearly explained. The opposing view is also relevant, yet it mainly repeats that hard work can solve financial problems rather than developing how or when improvement is possible. Your position is present, but it is not consistently explained or supported with a specific example. To strengthen the response, explain the reasoning behind each view more fully and add a concrete example, such as someone gaining training or seeking better-paid work while managing financial risk.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, separate paragraphs for the two views, and a conclusion. Labels such as “On The One Hand” and “On The Other Side” help signal the discussion. However, progression within paragraphs is limited, and several ideas are joined into long, repetitive sentences, especially in the paragraph about accepting an unsatisfactory job. Connectors such as “so” are used repeatedly, sometimes without making the relationship between ideas clear. The conclusion also introduces “Success need silent work” without integrating it into the argument. Use shorter, clearly focused sentences, develop one main point at a time, and use a wider range of accurate links between claims and examples.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “unsatisfactory job,” “qualifications,” “shortage of money,” and “career.” This gives the reader a basic understanding of your ideas. However, the range is limited and several words or phrases are repeated, particularly “person,” “hard working,” and “situation.” Frequent spelling errors, including “accecpt,” “definatly,” and “succesfull,” make the writing less clear and reduce control of vocabulary. Some expressions are also unnatural, such as “change their own time with their skills of working” and “situations will be automathics updated.” Build a bank of accurate topic phrases and check spelling and collocations; for example, describe someone as improving their financial circumstances or gaining work experience.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both simple and longer sentence forms, and the response communicates its general position. However, complex sentences are often faulty, and frequent errors can make relationships between ideas difficult to follow. For example, “If a person is hard working then the person will definatly change the situation” is followed by an unclear clause, while “the person will never faces problems” has an incorrect verb form. Articles and agreement are also inconsistent, as in “a unsatisfactory job” and “Success need silent work.” Capitalisation and punctuation are uneven, with sentence boundaries sometimes unclear. Practise accurate conditional sentences, subject–verb agreement, articles, and sentence punctuation, then proofread each sentence for a clear subject and verb.

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