Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-10-17

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

There are many debates on how to react in different situations and hoe to handle them in this way some are of the opinipn that it is totally fine to accept the situations such as unsatisfactory job and shortage of money and on the other side of the coin some individuals thought that it is better to to try to improve the situatons .I personally believe that accepting your fate is not a good deal for someone who has the ability to improve however keep on trying for sake of betterment in such situations in a good and wise turn so i disagree with accepting the situation.

If we talk about accepting the situation as it is will no benecificial for him it just make him alive amd fullfill hus normal desirses or you can say daily expencess it will not wrong to say that he will live a life od hand to mouth amd could not think out pf the box and could not see new possibilities which are given to him by god and by universe .He stucked in a loop where try his best and in end coukd get hus reward of his daily efforts and ultimately he will not be able to change the lagacy of his family and also his own personal life .

But on the other side there are many advantages and possibilities for someone whp could not satified by his bad situations and always thinking to make some great changes in his life.He will abel to think out of the box and attract new possibilities and chances for himselg and above all univers alos help him in thus way because lick favours the brave and ultimatelty oneday with pure effots and honesty he will achieve that that thing that he want too .

So in end i would say that keep on trying to make thung better for you is good thing instead of accepinting your situatins .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You give a clear personal view: you argue that people should try to improve difficult circumstances rather than simply accept them. You also discuss both perspectives, explaining that acceptance may provide basic stability while effort can create new opportunities. However, the discussion is uneven and the ideas remain general. The disadvantages of accepting a situation are described at length, but the possible reasons for accepting one—such as recognising limits, protecting health, or avoiding unnecessary risk—are not explored. The claims about “new possibilities” and luck are also not supported with a specific example. Develop each side with a reason and a relevant example, then make your comparison more explicit to address the task more fully.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has an overall structure: an introduction states your position, two body paragraphs present contrasting views, and a final sentence restates your conclusion. This makes the main direction understandable. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes difficult to follow because several ideas are joined into very long sentences, particularly in the opening and the paragraph about acceptance. Linking phrases such as “on the other side” and “above all” help signal relationships, but some transitions feel mechanical, and references such as “that thing” are unclear. Use shorter sentences to separate each reason, and make the connection between claims explicit. A clearer topic sentence for each body paragraph would also help the reader follow the argument.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt some topic-related and figurative language, including “think out of the box,” “hand to mouth,” and “luck favours the brave.” These expressions show an effort to vary your vocabulary, but several are awkward or imprecise in context, and repeated references to “situations” and “possibilities” limit flexibility. Spelling errors such as “sitatutins,” “expencess,” and “effots” are frequent enough to distract the reader. Some phrases, including “accepting your fate” and “make some great changes,” are understandable but not especially precise for this discussion. Build a reliable set of collocations for work, finances, and personal circumstances, and proofread spelling carefully so your intended meaning is consistently clear.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt to express connected and complex ideas, but sentence structures are often difficult to control. For example, “If we talk about accepting the situation as it is will no beneficial for him” lacks a clear grammatical subject and has an incomplete verb pattern. In “it just make him alive,” the subject–verb agreement is incorrect, while “where try his best” is missing a subject. Long sentences joined with commas also make clause relationships unclear. Most of the response relies on extended sentences rather than a controlled mix of simple and complex forms. Practise building accurate sentences with a clear subject and verb, then combine ideas using subordinate clauses and appropriate punctuation.

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