Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-10-18

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Some people argue that it is good to accept a bad condition, like decrease of money or unsatisfaction to job. Other people believe that it is advantageous to try and overcome such situations. I beleive that we should improve situations rather than to accept it without trying to do best.

On the one hand, it would be better to accept the situations regarding to the unsatisfaction to job or loss of money. In this case, you will not feel stress and be relaxed that will be good for health. By keeping your mind relax, you will move forward to another research of job, This will help you to attain money for next time and will be replaceable that lose. For example, if you face some bad experience from any job where you were not satisfied, always taught you the lesson for the next time.

On the other hand, it is crucial to seek for a better job and improve the situations of loss of money. with my perspective, human always learn more after facing different situations. You will earn better when you try more. Human can improved the mistakes after tying it for another time. Experiencing bad situations makes the man more careful for the next time and came to success. Facing bad situations helps human to chose better in the second turn. As the businessman face difficulties at the starting of their business while at last they became a successful businessman in market.

In conclusion, people should not feel stress on facing bad circumstaces related to job or money shortage, howerver they should try to overcome them by trying it do better for next time. I believed that once you face difficulty, next time it will lead you to success.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address both views and state a clear preference for improving difficult circumstances, especially in the opening and conclusion. The discussion is relevant, but the reasons are often asserted rather than explained. For example, the point that accepting a setback reduces stress is understandable, yet the link between staying relaxed and finding another job needs clearer development. Similarly, the claim that people learn from difficulties is repeated in several forms, while the businessman example is general and does not show how persistence leads to success. To strengthen the response, explain each view with a specific, developed example and make your position more nuanced—for instance, distinguish accepting what cannot be changed from taking practical steps to improve it.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable overall structure: an introduction, separate paragraphs for the two views, and a conclusion. The signposts “On the one hand,” “On the other hand,” and “In conclusion” help readers follow the discussion. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes unclear, and ideas are linked mechanically or repeated. In the first body paragraph, the movement from reduced stress to “another research of job” and then replacing a loss is difficult to follow. The second paragraph repeats the idea of learning from hardship without clearly building a sequence of cause and effect. Improve cohesion by grouping related points, using clear references, and making each sentence develop the previous one rather than restating it.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “overcome,” “difficulties,” “successful,” and “shortage of money,” and the main meaning is generally understandable. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate, sometimes making the message awkward: “decrease of money,” “unsatisfaction to job,” “research of job,” and “replaceable that lose.” There are also spelling errors such as “beleive,” “circumstaces,” and “howerver.” Aim to learn vocabulary in natural phrases, such as “financial hardship,” “job dissatisfaction,” and “look for a new position,” and check spelling carefully. More precise wording would help you express the contrast between accepting a situation and actively changing it.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more extended sentence forms, including clauses beginning with “if” and “while,” and the overall message can usually be understood. However, control is inconsistent, particularly in verb forms, agreement, articles, and sentence boundaries. Examples include “Human can improved the mistakes,” “always taught you the lesson,” and “they became a successful businessman,” where the verb forms or agreement do not fit the intended meaning. The sentence beginning “By keeping your mind relax” also has an incomplete or unclear construction. Practise building accurate sentences with a clear subject and verb, and check tense and agreement in each clause. Use complex structures only when you can control their grammar and punctuation.

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