Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-10-18

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Many people believe accepting the unfortunate events in their lives is the best decision that one can make while others debate that not giving up is the best device in such cases. I agree with the latter.

In my opinion, accepting ones fate is not the ultimate solution to the problems of an individual. A sense of persistence and not giving up excites the person to work harder to improve his living conditions. If one employee gets an undesirable employment or receives monetary funds inadequate to support his living expenses he can pursue this job for a limited period of time and keep an eye out for a better opportunity. Many great figures in history have left their mark just because of their persistence and enthusiasm to achieve their goals. For instance, Muhammad Ali Jinnah, the founder of Pakistan, never gave up on his efforts to make a separate state for Muslims despite the adverse circumstances and severe opposition.

Another example which is worth of mentioning is of Elon Musk, founder of Tesla and head of NASA who tried to launch his rocket three times but failed but the fourth time he succeeded.

In contrast to this, many people believe that accepting ones destiny is the best measure one can take. It is considered practical. Many individuals with old beliefs think that good employment and opportunities only come by good fortune and has nothing to do with the hard work. They believe one should show gratitude towards God whether or not they get their preferred job or adequate salary, in this way, God shall give provide them more.

To conclude, giving up and not trying hard is a cowardice act and those who do not strive for better opportunities, never get their desired employment leading to a dull,drab and dreary life which is void of happiness.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

Your position is clear from the introduction (“I agree with the latter”) and conclusion, and you address both views: persistence is supported with examples, while acceptance is presented as practical and linked to gratitude and belief in fortune. This covers the task well. The discussion is not equally developed, however. The case for acceptance is brief and largely attributed to “old beliefs,” without explaining when accepting a difficult situation might be sensible—for example, when circumstances cannot be changed immediately. The examples of Jinnah and Musk support perseverance, but the Musk example is not clearly connected to improving an unsatisfactory job or financial hardship. To strengthen the response, explain the benefits and limits of each view and make the examples more directly relevant to the question.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, a developed paragraph supporting persistence, a contrasting paragraph, and a conclusion. Connectors such as “In contrast to this” and “To conclude” help signal the direction of the argument, and the overall progression is easy to follow. Some links are less smooth or precise. The paragraph beginning “Another example” is separated from the preceding discussion even though it continues the same point, while the shift to the opposing view could be prepared more clearly. The conclusion also introduces a strong judgement (“a cowardice act”) rather than synthesising the two views. Group related examples together, use clearer references between ideas, and make the final paragraph summarise your reasoning rather than add a new claim.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range of vocabulary and attempt some less common expressions, including “persistence,” “adverse circumstances,” and “monetary funds.” These choices help communicate the main ideas, and the meaning remains clear. However, several phrases are inaccurate or unnatural, such as “the best device” for a solution, “worth of mentioning,” and “good employment.” Some wording is also overly dramatic or repetitive: “dull, drab and dreary” adds little precision, and “giving up and not trying hard” repeats the same idea. Aim for natural collocations and more exact language, particularly when describing the opposing view. For example, “a practical response” and “secure a better position” would fit the argument more naturally than the current expressions.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, including conditional structures such as “If one employee gets… he can…” and a relative clause in “those who do not strive…”. Most sentences communicate their meaning, but some grammatical errors remain. Examples include the missing apostrophe in “ones fate,” the agreement error in “opportunities… has nothing,” and the faulty construction “tried to launch his rocket three times but failed but the fourth time he succeeded.” The final sentence also needs clearer punctuation and structure. Review possessives, subject–verb agreement, and sentence boundaries, and avoid joining contrasting clauses with repeated “but.” More accurate control of these patterns would make your varied sentence structures easier to read.

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