Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-10-19

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Some individual consider that it is best to agree to detiremntal circumstances such as unfulfilling job and lack of money but other citizens assum that it is better to pursuee and enhance such circumstances . both perspective given below .

To Begin with Some Citzens consider it is believes to beliefs to detrimental circumstances like lack of money unfulfling job because They believes and accept their condition. they don't want to alternate their lives.They also want to live with condition. They thought if they does not accept their situation. they become helpless furthermore they believe if they adopt their condition, one day their hardwork and acception condition will alternate their lives, Additionally , Some people thought this because of their some hope.

for instance:

Many individuals accept their situation and continue their work one day . they will become a successful person.

Beyond this , Other Citzens conisder it is good to attempt and enhance your circumstances because , They consider it is much good for their futher more they belives that if they are involves some unfulfilling job and lack of money so they want to improve their condition and circumstances. because if they go other opportunity. how do they become a successful person because they thought if they don't change their field they not become a successful person.

for instance: many people feels unfulfilling with their jobs so they achieve a success.

in mye opinion: if some citzens does not feel comfortable to unfulfilling job so i consider they leave it and apply for new opportunity because it is good of their current situation and their family so if they get a new opportunity definitely lack of money become diminish

In the conclusion:many individual believes that they face their and accept their condition because they thought one day everything will be allright. other individuals thought if they try to alternate their situation so this excellent for their lives and their current situation

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You address both views: the first body paragraph explains accepting difficult circumstances, while the next argues for seeking better opportunities. Your opinion is also stated, particularly when you say someone unhappy in a job should “leave it and apply for new opportunity.” However, the discussion remains partial because the reasons are brief and often unclear. For example, the claim that accepting a situation may eventually lead to success is not explained, and the example about people achieving success in unsatisfying jobs does not show how or why. Your position is present but appears only near the end. Develop each view with a clear reason and a specific, relevant example, and state your opinion more consistently across the response.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has an identifiable overall structure: an introduction, separate paragraphs for the two views, your opinion, and a conclusion. This helps readers recognise the main stages of the discussion. However, progression within paragraphs is often difficult to follow, and linking expressions are repetitive or awkward. For instance, “because” and “they believe” recur without clearly showing how one point leads to the next; the sentence beginning “because if they go other opportunity” is especially hard to interpret. The standalone “for instance” lines also interrupt the flow rather than introducing developed examples. Use clearer topic sentences, connect each reason directly to its explanation, and make the conclusion summarise your stated position rather than repeat both views.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You attempt vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “detrimental circumstances,” “unfulfilling job,” “opportunity,” and “successful person.” These choices show an effort to discuss the issue beyond very basic terms. However, the range is limited and many words or phrases are repeated, while frequent spelling and word-choice errors make meaning difficult to follow. Examples include “detiremntal,” “pursuee,” “acception condition,” and “alternate their lives”; the intended meanings are sometimes unclear or the combinations are unnatural. Build a reliable set of topic vocabulary and check spelling and collocations. Prefer precise expressions such as “accept a difficult situation,” “improve one’s financial circumstances,” and “seek a more satisfying job.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt to express reasons and conditions using longer sentences, including “if they are involves some unfulfilling job and lack of money,” but these complex attempts are often faulty. Errors in agreement and verb forms occur frequently: “Some individual consider,” “they believes,” and “if they does not accept” should use correctly matched subjects and verbs. Sentence boundaries and punctuation are also inconsistent, as in “They thought if they does not accept their situation. they become helpless furthermore…” This makes relationships between ideas harder to understand. Most sentences rely on simple patterns, with limited accurate variety. Practise forming clear subject–verb sentences first, then add subordinate clauses with correct verb forms and punctuation.

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