Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-10-20

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The bad stress situation such as an unsatisfactory job, shortage of money is very critical issue in pakistan. lack of unempolyment and lack of huge amount of salary jobs is a big concern of educated person in pakistan. there is some advantages and dis advantages.

overall if we would comparison pakistan with other countries with prospective of job, there is no such kind of best jobes without 3, one is army, second doctorand third is lawyer. then there would be no single best job in pakistan. if we could see other nations there is huge amount of jobs available. in those countries alot of industries so they create thousends of jobs in every year. and governament also give monthly allowance to every single person.

mover over in pakistan many of bachelor students go aborad for study and bright future. there is currently 2025 ratio above then 60% students go aborad for master and finding jobs. and according to bbc news 40 percent PHD students go aborad for finding jobs. jobs is very important for life survival and fullfill over life desires.and if you have job then you have money. my elder brother go australia after getting bachelor they get a superior job in australia.

money is always very important for future and future respect. some people argue it is great to try and improve such situations we would like to say it is depend on governament policies. what would student do best so they go abroad and get there goals.

i give suggestion for job less person who should dont wast his time get diploma after intermediate and go abroad for job hopefully they get best jobs and get there goal easly.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

The response is relevant to employment and financial hardship in Pakistan, and it includes a personal example about your brother moving to Australia. However, it only minimally addresses the actual discussion: the two views are not clearly explained as accepting a difficult situation versus trying to improve it. Most of the response describes job shortages and going abroad, while the claim that improvement depends on government policies is not developed into a clear argument. Your final suggestion to gain a diploma and seek work abroad gives a position, but it does not fully answer how people should respond to bad situations or support that view with reasons. To strengthen the response, explain both perspectives directly, state your opinion clearly, and develop each main point with a relevant example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is some paragraphing, and the response moves from employment conditions to overseas study and then to advice. However, the ideas are not arranged in a clear argument, so the reader has difficulty following how they answer the question. The opening mentions advantages and disadvantages, but these are not then organised into two distinct views. Connectors such as “overall,” “moreover,” and “and” are used, but they often introduce another loosely related point rather than show a precise relationship. The final paragraph also shifts abruptly from government policy to personal advice. A clearer structure—introduction with your position, one paragraph for each view, and a conclusion—would make the progression easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some topic-related vocabulary, including “unsatisfactory job,” “shortage of money,” “monthly allowance,” and “survival,” which helps communicate the general subject. However, the range is basic and repetitive, with frequent spelling and word-choice problems that sometimes make meaning difficult to interpret. For example, “lack of unempolyment” appears to express the opposite of the intended idea, and “best jobes” and “bright future” are imprecise in context. Several phrases are also unnatural, such as “with prospective of job” and “future respect.” Aim for accurate, natural collocations and check spelling carefully. More precise terms such as “limited employment opportunities” and “financial security” would help express your ideas clearly.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts some longer sentences, for example, “if we could see other nations there is huge amount of jobs available,” but sentence structures are mostly simple or joined with “and,” and errors occur frequently. Problems with sentence boundaries and punctuation make several ideas run together. There are also recurring issues with articles, agreement, and verb forms: “there is huge amount” needs an article, “jobs is very important” has incorrect agreement, and “my elder brother go Australia” has errors in both the verb form and preposition. Capitalisation is inconsistent, including at the start of sentences and for “Pakistan.” Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then add controlled complex structures using clauses such as “because” or “although.”

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