Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-10-20

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Over recent years, Some people believe the that is is best to accept a bad situation, such as unpleasant job or shortage of money. Some people argue that that is better to try and improve depend on situations has hotly debated issue in society. This matter particularly significant due to its impact on environment and jobs, influencing both individuals and communities. While some people that it is the best to accept the bad situations. I firmly, believe that it is better to try and improve situations. In this essay I will, present my reason and supporting my view point address and potential counterarguments.

Some people believe that accepting a bad situation can sometimes be a sensible decision. This is because not every problem can be solved immediately, and worrying too much may cause stress and anxiety. Although this view point may seem valid to some extent, I believe its overlooks several key aspect. Another reason why people hold this belief is due to depression and stress. For instance a person who cannot find the a better job may need to continue working in their current position to support their family.

Nevertheless, these arguments are not entirely convincing when weighed against the broader implications.

One of the main reason I support people can develop new skills new jobs and gain qualifications, and searcher for the better employment opportunities. Similarly, those who face financial difficulties can create a budget and learn how mange their expenses.

Therefore, it is clear my opinion is well founded and supported by both evidence and reasoning.

In conclusion, I, believe that it is best option to try and improve such situations clearly support should make an effort to improve their situations whenever possible.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You state a clear preference for improving difficult circumstances, and you give relevant reasons for accepting them, including the need to support a family and the stress that change can bring. However, the discussion is only partial: the view in favour of improvement is not explained in a complete, well-supported way, and the paragraph beginning “One of the main reason” is difficult to follow. The opening also introduces impacts on “environment and jobs” without developing them, which distracts from the task. To strengthen the response, explain both positions in balanced detail and support your own view with a specific example. The response meets the stated length requirement; 17 words copied from the task prompt were not counted.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has an identifiable introduction, body paragraphs and conclusion, and transitions such as “Nevertheless” and “In conclusion” help signal movement between sections. However, the overall progression is not consistently clear. The first body paragraph combines acceptance, stress and a job example, while the next shifts abruptly to improvement without a developed link. Phrases such as “Therefore, it is clear my opinion is well founded” repeat the position rather than advancing the argument. Some linking expressions are also used mechanically, and the opening contains several ideas that do not connect clearly to the discussion. Organise the essay around one paragraph for each view, use clear topic sentences, and ensure each example is followed by an explanation of how it supports the point.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant topic vocabulary, including “unsatisfactory job,” “financial difficulties,” “qualifications” and “employment opportunities,” so the reader can identify the subject of the essay. However, the range is limited and several noticeable word-choice, word-form and spelling errors make parts difficult to understand. Examples include “searcher for the better employment opportunities,” “how mange their expenses” and “view point.” Some phrases are also vague or unnatural, such as “broader implications” and “well founded and supported,” because they are not followed by specific detail. Aim for accurate, natural collocations and choose vocabulary that expresses the intended idea precisely. Proofreading for spelling and word forms will also make your argument easier to follow.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including “This is because not every problem can be solved immediately” and a sentence beginning “Although this view point may seem valid.” However, control is inconsistent, and many sentences contain errors in sentence structure, agreement, articles or punctuation. For example, “Some people argue that that is better to try and improve depend on situations has hotly debated issue” lacks a clear grammatical structure, while “One of the main reason I support people can develop…” combines clauses incorrectly. There are also frequent punctuation problems, such as unnecessary commas after “I firmly” and “I will.” Practise building complete sentences with one clear main clause, then check subject–verb agreement, articles and punctuation before adding subordinate clauses.

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