Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-10-21

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Some people believe that it is best situation such as unsatisfactory job because they think that shortage of money make a unique to others and feels a restful life and comfortable . The shortage of money also forced of those people which takes some rupees and make to improve to your future very high status .

And some people believe that when those who improve youself in this situation very carefully .

I agree those people who make a best survive in such situation and also improve yourself . Those people make a high position in a life . In this type of people also hardwork in searching the more money . They think that your's life make more easy ,comfortable and wounderful .

I give an opinion of those people that make a life easy and also play a hardwork itself they are more lucky and intelligent in your life . I also appriciates the those people that also a hardwork in your life. They also make a high position in the world and make more respect in a world .I also appriciate the people who also help the other people and cares the other people.

I satified the people that they suggest make a life comfortable and easy is also own .I agree the those people which make an a high experience in your life , they speak and teaches the those people that donot know about that any problems ,they also helps the poor people and make to a high position itself .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

The response attempts to discuss both views and gives a personal preference, particularly in “I agree those people who make a best survive” and the later praise of people who work hard and help others. However, the two positions in the question are not clearly explained: the opening appears to support accepting a shortage of money, but the reasons are difficult to follow, while the opposing view is only briefly mentioned. Most of the response repeats that people can improve their lives, gain status, and earn respect, without explaining how or giving a relevant example. As a result, the task is addressed only minimally and the reader cannot confidently identify a developed argument. Explain each view separately, then state your opinion clearly and support it with a specific example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is some basic organisation: the opening introduces the topic, later paragraphs express a preference, and phrases such as “And some people believe” and “I give an opinion” signal a change in focus. However, the ideas do not progress in a clear sequence. The second paragraph is only one incomplete thought, and subsequent paragraphs repeat similar claims about making life comfortable, achieving a high position, and helping others rather than developing distinct points. References such as “those people” and “they” are often unclear, so it is hard to tell which group is being discussed. Use one paragraph for each view and a final paragraph for your opinion, with clear topic sentences and links that show how each reason supports the argument.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response uses a small set of relevant words, including “shortage of money,” “unsatisfactory job,” “hardwork,” and “comfortable,” and it attempts to express ideas about work, status, and helping others. However, vocabulary is basic and repetitive, and several word choices or combinations make the intended meaning difficult to understand. For example, “make a unique to others,” “a best survive,” and “high experience” are not natural expressions in this context. Spelling errors such as “wounderful” and “appriciates” also reduce accuracy. Build a more precise range for discussing acceptance and improvement, and learn common collocations such as “accept a difficult situation,” “seek better-paid work,” and “improve one’s circumstances.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts some longer sentence forms, including “The shortage of money also forced of those people which takes some rupees,” but sentence structures are very limited overall and errors frequently obscure meaning. Problems include subject–verb agreement (“shortage of money make”), verb forms (“I also appriciates”), and pronoun consistency (“your life” when referring to “those people”). Articles and sentence construction are also unreliable, as in “I agree those people who make a best survive.” Several sentences lack a clear grammatical relationship between their clauses, and punctuation does not consistently separate ideas. Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then combine them with controlled clauses using “because,” “although,” and “who.” Check each sentence for a clear subject, verb, and consistent pronouns.

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