Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-10-21

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Some people believe that the it is the best to accept the bad situations such as the unsatifactory joba nd shortage of money.some says that we should improve the bad situation and get ouf of it.Both teh viesws are cooercty according to their own way .The fisrt one that accept the situation were coerrct becuse thaey said that becsuse they become a man that have trpo bear the burden of the family . he has to earn in young life to fulfill the need of the his family and his also . Thats why they choose to stay with the bad situation and they cabnot achieve the aims that they have dream for . They become busy in their fast lifes and do not have then time to think about it. thats is why they live contented with their lives and continue the earning a small amount of money .Some people get the job that does not match with the theor intellicultal property and they think that tgis is the blessing from the god and accept it.They accpet it by another cause that is the unemployment in the country .They have to feed thie families and some cautch it beacuse they are poor and only the one source of his family to feed them.They do not get the risk. The reason behind it that they are afraid of the taking risk and they remain in that worse condition for the whole life . They are correctt in their

opnion becuse they have to feed thier family and get out his family from the the end line of the proverty . They are wrong in the aspect that they do not want to get better in life. It is old saying that "God help those who help themselves ".

Some people says that they do not contentend with the bad situations .They always tries to get better in the life and wanted to fulfill their dreams . They are always the better than the fisrt one . They take the risks and as a resullt they achieve thier goals and then live a happy life and they and they feed their family well. They Enjoy the luxury life and enjoy all the facilities that the people with the first opnion do not have . In thsi ways, they always crave foe more and more and do better abd better in thier lifes . But the journey of these people are very hard and they do not enoy in their early life and remain busy in thier hard work and doing somthing good and good that satify their hunger.They do thier best to achieve their goals .That is the reson thay are always succesfull in their life.

In my opnnion, the people that always crave for more and more are better than those who are contented with the bad situation.The reason is that they always tried thier hard and became succesfull in their life .Their intellictual propety remin in use and make them a man with well behaviou and has the heart that felt the difficulties of the others.For example, there is a my relative who is very intelligent . he got the job in 9 sacle but he works to get better in his life so he always work hard after the jon and fiinally got a 17 scale job

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You address both views and give a clear preference for trying to improve one’s circumstances. The discussion of acceptance is relevant: you explain that family responsibilities, unemployment and fear of risk can make people stay in unsatisfactory work. You also contrast this with ambition and support your opinion with the example of your relative moving from a lower-grade job to a higher-grade one. However, some points are asserted rather than fully explained. For instance, the claim that ambitious people are “always successful” is too broad, and the benefits and risks of trying to change a situation could be explored more evenly. Develop each main reason with a specific explanation or example, and make the conclusion more explicit.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable overall structure: it discusses acceptance first, then efforts to improve circumstances, and finally gives your opinion and an example. This helps the reader identify the main stages of the argument. However, progression within paragraphs is often difficult to follow because several ideas are joined in long sequences, and links such as “That’s why” and “They are correct” are repeated or do not clearly show how one point follows from another. References such as “they” and “the first one” can also be unclear. Use shorter, more focused paragraphs and organise each around one main reason, with clear topic sentences and more precise linking and referencing.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You attempt vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “unemployment,” “take the risks,” “fulfill their dreams” and “achieve their goals.” These choices show that you can express the main ideas, but the range is often basic or repetitive, and inaccurate word forms, spelling and collocations sometimes make the meaning harder to understand. Examples include “intellictual propety,” “contentend,” “crave foe” and “the end line of the proverty.” Phrases such as “enjoy the luxury life” and “do better and better” are also imprecise or unnatural. Build a reliable set of topic vocabulary and check spelling and collocations; choose precise expressions rather than repeating broad terms such as “better” and “successful.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both simple and more extended sentence forms, including explanations with “because” and contrasts between the two views. However, control of sentence structure is inconsistent, and errors in agreement, verb forms, articles and sentence boundaries frequently make the argument difficult to read. For example, “Some people says” should be “Some people say,” while “They always tries” should be “They always try.” The opening also runs several sentences together without reliable capitalisation or punctuation. Practise building accurate sentences with one main clause and a clearly connected supporting clause, then check subject–verb agreement, tense and sentence boundaries. Greater accuracy in these basic patterns will make your ideas much clearer.

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