Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-10-21

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

First talks about the first view that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money.

In my opinion it is wrong view that we should do such a job with which we are not satisfy. doing such a job with which you are not satisfy is killing your self. With this a second thing which is include is facing shortage of money.I Think that in this age of technology if we can do work means we have brain to think and hands to work we should not stay with silence means we should work to earn.In this age of technology we can earn if we have dont any invesment. we can work online and can earn goog even without any invesments.But in case we have to leran skills and i think that we can earn skills on our own pace. so i disagree with first opinion to do a job with which we are not satisfy or we have to face shortage of money.

Now talks obout second view which is really correct and also motivated. we should never choose comfort zone over work. we should try to tech with diffivult situations. we shout never quit our work.If we have patience and courage to stay focused on our goals so we can succed.

I want to add an example as i am a BBA student and if i start a business with my friends and fails even after working hard so we should not lose hope. we should stay focused on our goals. we should learn from our mistakes. we should change our business strategies and should work more harder than before so there will be 90% chances of success other 10% could be luck.

so i agree with second point of view that we should try to improve our self

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You give a clear opinion in favour of trying to improve difficult circumstances, and you discuss both views, especially through your comments on work, money and persistence. The example of a business that fails and then changes its strategies is relevant and helps illustrate your position. However, the first view is introduced but not really explained: you do not give reasons why someone might accept a poor job or financial hardship, such as security or family responsibilities. Several claims, including that online work can provide income without investment and that there is a 90% chance of success, are asserted rather than supported. Develop both sides more evenly and explain your example carefully to make the response more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a basic structure: it moves from the first view to the second and then gives a personal example and conclusion. This makes your overall position possible to follow. However, progression within paragraphs is often unclear, and some transitions sound like notes rather than connected essay writing, such as “First talks about the first view” and “Now talks obout second view.” Repeated use of “we should” and “In this age of technology” also makes the links mechanical. Organise each paragraph around one main point, use clear topic sentences, and connect the explanation to its example with more precise referencing. A separate, concise conclusion would also give the argument a clearer ending.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “shortage of money,” “comfort zone,” “patience,” “focused on our goals,” and “business strategies.” These phrases help communicate your general ideas. However, the range is limited and several expressions are repeated, particularly “we should” and “satisfy.” There are also noticeable spelling and word-choice errors, such as “invesment,” “diffivult,” “succed,” and “earn skills,” which can make the reader pause or infer your meaning. Aim for more precise collocations and check spelling carefully. For example, describe acquiring skills rather than earning them, and use language that distinguishes accepting circumstances from giving up on improvement.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences with reasons, conditions and examples, so there is some effort to vary sentence structure. However, complex sentences are often faulty, and frequent errors sometimes make the meaning difficult to follow. Examples include “it is wrong view,” “we are not satisfy,” and “if we have patience and courage to stay focused … so we can succed,” where articles, verb forms and sentence construction need attention. Capitalisation and punctuation are also inconsistent, as in “I Think” and the long run-on sentences in the first paragraph. Practise building accurate sentences with one main clause and a clearly linked supporting clause, then check agreement, articles and punctuation.

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