Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-10-21

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Many people believe that bad situation do accept and it is the best, such an unsayisfactory job or shortage of money. Others people believe that it is better to try and improve such situations. In my view, i am strongly agree with the statement, it is better to try and improve such situations.

From my perspective, firstly we are human, so bad situations will come in our life this is normal. But we will try to improve our situations. One thing have to believe that, if we want to develop our life so we face to bad situations. We can see that, in the world have many billioniers and millioniers but was once day they faced to bad time. They try to best and gave best skills then they improve their bad situations. For example, Elon Musk and Bill Gates both billionier person but they had one day they faced to bad time and they did struggle, try and improve their bad situations. Now their are rechiest person in the world.

On the other hand, in my opinion I am fully disagree with the arguement. Because the most big reason is if we do not better our bad situations and do not enhance our situations so we will not change our life.Everyone wants to develop life. If we develop our life so have to hard work, without hardwork do not change our life. Lastly, I will say one line and this is we have to hard work and do not feel stress that time, beacaue if we struggle in our bad time so we will success in our future life.

In conclusion, I discuss the both side and I said , i am agree with the second statement and disagree with first statement. Main key of our life success this is better try and improve.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You give a clear preference for trying to improve difficult circumstances, and the examples of wealthy entrepreneurs are relevant to perseverance. However, the discussion of accepting a bad situation is not really developed: you mention this view in the opening and conclusion, but do not explain why someone might accept a job or financial hardship, such as because change is risky or circumstances are beyond their control. The supporting points for your own view—hard work and personal development—are repeated rather than explained in depth, and the claims about Musk and Gates are broad. This makes the response only partially address the two-sided task. To strengthen it, explain both perspectives and support each with a specific reason or example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, two body paragraphs and a conclusion, and phrases such as “On the other hand” signal a change in direction. However, progression within paragraphs is often unclear: the first body paragraph moves from a general statement about hardship to billionaires without clearly connecting the ideas, while the second repeats the position rather than developing a distinct opposing view. Linking phrases such as “so” and “because” are used repeatedly, and some references are difficult to follow, as in “they had one day they faced to bad time.” The conclusion also restates the opinion without drawing the discussion together. Use clearer topic sentences and connect each example explicitly to its main point.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “shortage of money,” “improve,” “develop,” and “struggle,” so the main topic is generally understandable. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate or repetitive, including “bad situations,” “try to best,” “rechiest person,” and “main key of our life success.” Spelling errors such as “unsayisfactory,” “billioniers,” and “beacaue” also make the writing less clear and reduce precision. Aim to use a wider set of accurate expressions for hardship, persistence and financial circumstances, and check spelling carefully. For example, replace repeated references to “bad situations” with more precise terms such as “financial hardship” or “difficult circumstances.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both simple and longer sentence forms, and the overall meaning can usually be understood. However, control is inconsistent, and many sentences contain errors in agreement, verb forms, articles or sentence construction. For example, “bad situation do accept” does not form a correct clause, “One thing have to believe” lacks a clear subject and correct verb form, and “their are rechiest person” has errors in both the verb and sentence structure. Some long sentences join several ideas without clear punctuation, as in the sentence about billionaires facing difficult times. Practise building accurate basic clauses first, then combine them with controlled connectors such as “although” and “because.” Check subject–verb agreement and use of articles when editing.

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