Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-10-22

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

It is often debated that it is best to accept any situation such as empty pocket or having no job. while others and I believe that we should try to improve such situations such as switching to a better job or excell in the same job. This essay will discuss both views.

On the first hand, there are people who accept any type of situation for example having a disaster in life or doing an unwilling job. They think that they should leave the situation upon fortune and they do not struggle. For example, one of uncle had a loss in his poultry farm business but he did not tried to find the fault instead he thought that it is about all his fortune. Moreover, there are people who are lazy and they do not struggle. For example, in Japan flood, there were many people who were watching their cars floating in the flood even they had the time to move their cars

On the other hand, It is always not good to do nothing for a bad situation. I have seen many people who chase their success even they had lot of failures in their life. For example, my cousin was expelled from his job without any major reason. He went to another institue same day and got a better job with higher salary. Moreover, my grandmother had paralysis in 2025. She was unable to walk or sit on the bed but instead of blaming the fate, she tried to walk everyday and did exercise. Now she can walk with the help of a walking stand and she do not have to be dependent on any other person.

Conclusively, in life we face many problems such as a loss in business or unexpected diseases. We should try to eradicate them from our life rather than accepting them.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You address both views and give a clear preference for trying to improve difficult circumstances, especially in the opening and conclusion. The examples about your uncle, cousin and grandmother make the discussion relevant and help explain why people may either accept or challenge hardship. However, the first view is less fully explored: it is mainly attributed to leaving matters to fortune or being lazy, without considering reasonable reasons for acceptance, such as limited control or protecting one’s wellbeing. The flood example is also not clearly connected to accepting a bad situation. To strengthen the response, explain the rationale behind both positions and make each example directly illustrate that rationale.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a clear overall structure: an introduction, one paragraph for each view, and a conclusion that restates your position. The contrast between the two main paragraphs is easy to follow, and examples generally appear alongside the relevant point. However, some links are mechanical or unclear. “On the first hand” is not the usual contrast marker, and “Moreover” introduces another point without making its relationship to the previous one precise. The flood example also interrupts the paragraph’s line of reasoning. Use more natural transitions, and organise each body paragraph around a clear claim followed by explanation and a closely connected example. This would make progression smoother and references easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use enough vocabulary to discuss hardship, effort and outcomes, including “fortune,” “failures,” “expelled” and “dependent.” Some less common expressions are attempted, but several choices or collocations are inaccurate or unnatural, which limits precision: “empty pocket,” “leave the situation upon fortune,” “chase their success” and “eradicate them from our life.” There are also spelling and word-form slips, such as “excell” and “institue.” These do not prevent the reader from understanding your main points, but they make parts of the response less fluent. Aim for standard collocations and check spelling; for example, describe people as “relying on luck” or “pursuing success,” rather than translating expressions literally.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including clauses with “but,” “even” and “instead of,” and the overall meaning remains understandable. However, some errors in verb forms, agreement, articles and punctuation recur. Examples include “he did not tried” (use the base form after “did not”), “she do not have to be dependent” (subject–verb agreement), and “one of uncle” (a missing possessive or article). Sentence boundaries and capitalisation also need attention, as in “while others” after a full stop and “On the other hand, It.” These issues do not usually block communication, but they reduce accuracy. Review past-tense forms, agreement and sentence punctuation, then proofread each sentence.

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