Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-10-22

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Many individual believe that its good to accept the situation the way it is goiung rather than trying hard to change it with your hardwork , such as the job you dont want to countine or if your are going through shortage of money. Althrough, I my opioin i competely disagree with this statement that leave everything on the time or doing nothing to change your own life.

On the one hand, many people believe do not try hard to change the situation you are in move with that only. Some individual argue to leave everything on time, with passing time everything comes the way you want either you are happy with the job your doing or or you are shortage of money. For example, If the person was doing 9 to 5 pm job and getting less money in that job with bundle of work they should continue with that, they think with right time without doing hardwork or hunting for new job they get job.

On the other hand, some of people believe to achieve anything in life you have to fight with the situation your are stuck with do not wait for right time. For yourself you have to make right time with you by handiling everything with proper staterge, smartwork and hardwork. For example, you can apply for other companies if you are not happy with your current job without leaving thaat job onces you are selected for other company with good pay scale at that time you are free to leave your current job.

In conculsion, In my opioin rather than leave everything on the situation you have the power to trun that movement into your favour with your smartness and most important hardwork without lossing hope.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You address both views and make your own position clear: you disagree with simply accepting an unsatisfactory situation and favour taking practical action. The two body paragraphs are relevant, with examples about staying in a low-paid job and applying elsewhere before resigning. However, the discussion of acceptance is less fully explained: the claim that time will make things improve is stated, but the reasons someone might choose acceptance—such as stability, limited opportunities, or personal circumstances—are not explored. The improvement argument is more concrete, though it could explain further how planning and effort lead to better outcomes. Develop both perspectives more evenly and connect each example explicitly to the view it supports.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a clear overall structure: an introduction, separate paragraphs for the two views, and a conclusion that restates your opinion. Signposting such as “On the one hand,” “On the other hand,” and “In conclusion” helps readers follow the discussion. Some connections are less smooth or precise, however. For example, “leave everything on time” is repeated, and the sentence beginning “Some individual argue” contains several ideas joined together without clear relationships. The repeated “For example” openings also make the progression somewhat mechanical. Use pronouns or varied transitions where appropriate, and divide longer sentences so that each claim, explanation, and example is clearly linked.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “shortage of money,” “current job,” “good pay scale,” and “hardwork,” so the main ideas are generally understandable. However, the range is limited and several word-choice, collocation, and spelling errors make the expression less natural. Phrases such as “leave everything on the time,” “fight with the situation,” and “make right time with you” do not convey the intended meaning idiomatically. There are also repeated forms such as “hardwork” and “right time,” alongside misspellings including “staterge” and “conculsion.” Build a wider set of accurate phrases for discussing acceptance, financial security, and career change, and check spelling and collocations carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including conditional examples such as “if you are not happy with your current job” and a contrast between waiting and taking action. Some sentences communicate the intended point, but grammatical control is uneven. For instance, “Many individual believe” has a subject–verb agreement error, while “if your are going through shortage of money” has problems with pronouns and article use. The opening sentence also runs several clauses together, and “they should continue with that, they think” joins independent ideas with only a comma. Practise agreement, articles, and sentence boundaries, then proofread each sentence for a clear subject and verb. More accurate complex sentences would make your reasoning easier to follow.

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