Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-10-23

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

People have differing views about whether it is best to accept a bad situation or it is better to try and improve such situations. It is the more appropriate approach to try and get a well environment. Supporters of the first perspective argue that people should go through a situation for a lifelife, changing corporate jobs would not be a good approch for them also struggeling with less money would be acceptable for them rathen then changing their occupations where as opponents believe that without taking risk no one could find a road of success, they think people should try their best to improve the situation. This essay will examine both arguments before explaining why I believe that it is better to try hard and improve such difficulties.

On the one hand, there are several convincing arguments in favour of stuck for the one business or job for a long time while it is a bad situation such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. The most significant reason is that they belive quite a job could be risky or have chances to find difficult another job. This is because nowadays job sector has facing the shortage of work,emloyees often do not get jobs easily. As a result,they have to face lots of curcumstances such as unemplyments and unfit jobs, which may not be particularly beneficial forall kinds of people. For example, when a person leave a job for better accomodation where he get 40 thousands and now he get a job just for 25 to 30

would not be an good apporch.

On the other hand, those who argue that trying hard and get a new job or enhance yourself would be better than stuck on a difficult situation.they belive it is good to take a risk to be better salary.

In conclusion, both have reasonable arguments in their favour. However, I believe that stuck on a detrimental situation for fear or comfort zone would not be a good approch because it makes people's life horrible and exshusted and trying to be get or find an another situation and enhance such situations can chnage peoples life . Ultimately, while first approch is comfortable but i will definitely support the second idea.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address both views and state a clear preference for trying to improve difficult circumstances, especially in the introduction and conclusion. The discussion of accepting a poor situation is more developed: you explain the risk of leaving a job and give a salary example. However, the opposing view receives only a brief paragraph, with the general claim that taking risks can lead to a better salary; it needs explanation and a relevant example. Some points are also unclear, such as “go through a situation for a lifelife,” so the reasoning is difficult to follow. Develop both sides more evenly and explain how your examples support your position.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable introduction, two body paragraphs and a conclusion, and signposts such as “On the one hand,” “On the other hand” and “In conclusion” help identify the stages of the discussion. However, progression is uneven: the first body paragraph contains several ideas in a long, difficult-to-follow sequence, while the second is very brief and does not build its point. Some connections are unclear, particularly the transition from job shortages to the example about changing jobs. Sentence boundaries and punctuation also make parts of the argument hard to track. Use one main idea per paragraph, connect each example explicitly to that idea, and develop the second viewpoint before concluding.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “shortage of money,” “take a risk,” “detrimental situation” and “comfort zone.” However, the range is limited and several inaccurate or misspelled expressions make meaning less clear, such as “well environment,” “stuck for the one business,” “better accomodation” and “exshusted.” Some phrases appear to use the wrong word or form, including “a good apporch” and “enhance such situations.” Aim for accurate, natural collocations rather than forcing formal-sounding expressions. Proofread spelling and choose precise phrases for employment and financial circumstances; this will make your ideas easier to understand and give your vocabulary more flexibility.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt some longer sentences and use subordinate clauses, for example “This is because…” and “while…,” but complex structures are often faulty, and sentence control is inconsistent. Errors include “people should go through a situation,” “job sector has facing,” and “when a person leave a job,” where verb forms or agreement are incorrect. Articles and sentence construction are also problematic in “would not be an good apporch,” while the final sentence combines several ideas without clear grammatical links. These errors sometimes make the intended meaning difficult to follow. Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then combine them with one clear subordinate clause, checking verb forms, articles and punctuation.

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