Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-10-24
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
It is believed by a few individuals that it is to accept bad situation, such as an unsatisfatory job or shortage of money, while others argue that people should try to improve such situation. This essay will discuss both views and I will give my own point of view.
On the one hand, sometimes it is good for people to accept bad situations because they can learn and motivated with bad situation. To elaborate the former view point, sometimes people do not do any work or job because they are unsatisfy with their job. However, they have to accept a bad situation for earning money and to servive. Some people are well-educated but they do not do job in the hope of better job so they reject the job offer. Apart form this, sometimes people feel that employees rude and selfish. For example, they cannot find a better job and they have to suffer from difficulties, such as they cannot enjoy their life due to lack of money.
On the other hand, some people believe that people should try to be better and improve situations. People should learn more skills for getting a better job because in this digital era, skills are more important than education. What is more, people should do their jobs seriously so that they can got good income. They should try to gain more knowledge about their job to achieve better income.
In conclusion, although people should accept bad situation, I believe that they should
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0
You introduce both views and state that you will give your opinion, but the response only partially fulfils the task. The discussion of accepting a difficult situation is unclear: the claim that people can “learn and motivated” is not explained, and the example about rejecting a job offer does not clearly support acceptance. The second view is more relevant, with suggestions to learn skills and work seriously, but these points are brief and lack a specific example. Most importantly, the conclusion ends unfinished—“I believe that they should”—so your final position is not communicated. The response is also one word below the required minimum. Develop each view with a clear reason and example, and complete the conclusion with an explicit opinion.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5
The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, separate paragraphs for the two views, and a conclusion. Linking phrases such as “On the one hand,” “On the other hand,” and “In conclusion” help signal this organisation. However, progression within paragraphs is often difficult to follow. For example, the paragraph about acceptance moves from learning, to not working, to rejecting job offers, and then to rude employees without clearly connecting these ideas. “To elaborate the former view point” also promises an explanation that does not follow clearly. The unfinished conclusion disrupts the overall flow. Group related points together and use clear cause-and-effect links so each paragraph develops one central idea.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
You use some vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “shortage of money,” “well-educated,” “digital era,” and “gain more knowledge.” These choices make the general subject understandable. However, the range is limited and several word-choice, collocation, and spelling errors make the writing less precise. Examples include “unsatisfatory,” “servive,” “Apart form this,” and “employees rude and selfish.” Phrases such as “learn and motivated with bad situation” are also difficult to interpret. Aim to use accurate topic-specific expressions and check spelling and word forms carefully. More precise language would help distinguish between accepting circumstances, coping with them, and taking practical steps to improve them.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
You attempt some longer sentences, including “People should learn more skills for getting a better job because in this digital era, skills are more important than education,” and use basic structures to express reasons and examples. However, the range remains limited, and errors occur frequently in sentence construction and verb forms. For instance, “it is to accept bad situation” is missing a suitable structure and article, while “they can learn and motivated” does not maintain a parallel verb form. “They can got good income” also uses an incorrect verb form, and “although people should accept bad situation” lacks an article. Practise building accurate complex sentences with because, although, and so that, and check articles, agreement, and verb forms before submitting.
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