Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-10-24

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Many people argue that it is best to accept a bad situation such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money due to people are usally take risk and after as a result, they are loss money and time whereas, other people believed that it is better to try and improve such situations for come out from dark life. This both view are considerable in positive and negative effects.

Which people support first view who tend to believe that they are not satisfied by job or income and spends time within in field and do not try to come out. Therefor, people losses their expectation and dreams over here. In addition, They are not fully satisfied to their family and society by food, entertaintment, basic needs, healthcare and security. Although, they are not take the risk as much to come out from shortage of money. If people are tried to much as maximum knowlage and use best resources along with some funds they easily come out from shortage of money.

First and foremost people who support second view, who people are not satisfied by job there are try to improve their skills and situation and he or she will achieve better life style through whole life. For instance, one people have skills and knowleage and he or she desever role in company as compare to other people are not as much skill worker and both job role are equal so that people are try to find out the mistake and implement their time and smart work. Thus, he or she tried to achieve good job and satisfied job. However, which people earns more than other.

In concusion, I support the second view, due to hardwork and improve skills for better lifestyle and satisfied job. It will be helpful in the future like getting respects , everyone take serious and acheieved dream job along with not facing money crisies or disaster.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You address both views and state your preference for trying to improve one’s circumstances in the conclusion. The discussion of the first view mentions avoiding risk, while the second includes developing skills and seeking a more satisfying job. However, the ideas are limited and not fully explained: the first paragraph does not clearly show why accepting a difficult situation might be sensible, and the example about two workers with equal roles is hard to follow. Your position is also not made clear until the conclusion. Develop each view with a clear reason and a specific, relevant example, and explain why your preferred approach is more convincing.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has an introduction, separate paragraphs for the two views, and a conclusion, so there is some organisation. However, the overall progression is not always clear because several sentences contain ideas that are difficult to connect. For example, the first body paragraph moves from accepting a job to family needs and then to using resources to escape poverty without explaining the links. Connectors such as “In addition,” “Although,” and “Thus” are used, but some do not express the relationship accurately. The example beginning “one people have skills” also lacks clear referencing. Plan each paragraph around one main point, then use clear topic sentences and logical links between explanation and example.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “shortage of money,” “skills,” “resources,” and “satisfied job,” and you attempt phrases such as “come out from dark life.” However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations make the meaning unclear, including “losses their expectation,” “desever role,” and “implement their time.” Spelling errors such as “knowlege,” “entertaintment,” and “concusion” are also noticeable. These issues sometimes make the reader work to understand your ideas. Build a more precise set of phrases for employment, financial hardship, and personal improvement, and check spelling and word forms during revision.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentences, including a conditional idea in “If people are tried to much… they easily come out from shortage of money.” However, complex sentences are often faulty, and frequent errors in verb forms, agreement, articles, and sentence construction can make the meaning difficult to follow. For example, “This both view are considerable” has incorrect agreement, while “people who support second view, who people are not satisfied by job there are try” is not a complete, well-formed structure. There are also problems with tense and subject–verb agreement in “other people believed” and “people losses.” Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then combine them using clauses such as “because,” “although,” and “if.”

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