Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-10-24

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Many folks argue that people should accept their unfavourable situtations like financially unstable job while others think that a person should put an effort to change their undesired life conditions. In my opinion, I believe that a person should work consistently to improve his way of life by taking the necessary risks like transitioning his job or sometimes even his career too.

Talking more about the given topic, a person who constantly faces a toxic environment in his working life tends to become toxic in his personal life. He becomes stubborn and his attitude becomes undesirably bad with his close friends and family. Moreover, this would also affect his mental health and as a result his creatiive mindset detoriated more quickly with the passage of time. Similarly, if his working salary is not good enough to meet his both ends, he should try to change his job or put some extra hardwork to achieve the promotional threshold. But most of the people suggest that accepting the hardship of life is the best choice to make while another school of thought suggests an importance of coverting those bad situations into a satisfactory life. A recent research states that most of the millionaires were born poor which clearly indicates that they refuse to accept their poor way of life and that help them to be successful in their lives.

To conclude the above discussion, working to change the unsatisfactory life stage is always fruitful in many aspects including money or sometimes related to mental peace. As there is a quote, "God helps those who help themselves".

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You present a clear opinion that people should try to improve difficult circumstances, and you support this with relevant points about workplace stress, mental health and low pay. The example about people who rise from poverty also helps illustrate your view. However, the discussion of accepting a bad situation is much less developed: it is mentioned mainly as what “most of the people suggest,” without explaining why someone might reasonably choose acceptance, such as limited opportunities or responsibilities that make change risky. Some claims, including the statement about millionaires, are broad and would be stronger with a specific example or qualification. Develop both perspectives more evenly and explain how your examples support each one.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable overall structure: an introduction, a main paragraph and a conclusion, with ideas generally moving from workplace difficulties to your preferred solution. Linking expressions such as “Moreover,” “Similarly” and “To conclude” help signal relationships between points. However, the main paragraph combines several different functions, including describing the effects of a toxic job, discussing salary, presenting the opposing view and giving research. The transition beginning “But most of the people suggest” is abrupt, and “this” in the millionaire example does not clearly identify the idea it refers to. Use separate paragraphs for the two views and make references explicit; this would create clearer progression and less mechanical linking.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range of topic vocabulary, including “toxic environment,” “mental health,” “promotional threshold” and “hardship,” and your meaning is generally clear. There are also attempts at more formal phrasing, such as “unsatisfactory life stage.” However, some choices are inaccurate or unnatural: “financially unstable job” does not clearly express a shortage of money, “meet his both ends” is an incorrect collocation, and “coverting those bad situations” appears to mean changing or overcoming them. Spelling errors such as “situtations,” “creatiive” and “detoriated” also reduce accuracy. Choose more natural collocations and check spelling carefully; precise wording will make your argument more convincing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, including conditional structures such as “if his working salary is not good enough… he should try to change his job” and a relative clause in “a person who constantly faces a toxic environment.” Most sentences remain understandable, so errors do not generally obstruct your message. Some grammatical problems are present, however. In “that help them to be successful,” the verb should agree with the singular subject “that”; “his both ends” also has an incorrect determiner order, and “his creative mindset deteriorated” needs a suitable tense or verb construction in this context. Review subject–verb agreement, possessive/determiner patterns and tense consistency, while continuing to use varied sentence structures.

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