Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-10-25

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Many people think that, it is a good way to accept a awful situation,like unfulfilling jobs or lack of money.But some people thought that it is best to try for successful and enhance like condition. I will discuss the both situation in this states. On the one hand, many humans thought that to accept the good and bad states. People think that, they do not need to try for successful life and they agree for all the situation. Some people take the lack of salary and they does not try again and they accept the this condition so they are happy in this condition.

On the other hand, many people believe the improvement. When people should achieve some thing so they are try again and again as long as they does not achieve.For example, my sister want to gain a goal so she was stuggle for this goal.And one day achieve this mission.My sister told me if you want some thing so you are face many difficulties but do not accept failer.

In conclusion,There are both beneficial for humans but some people do not like the difficulties and they do not face the problems and thought that the life is good all he situation but other hand people like to stuggle and they are faces a lot of difficulties and achieve you goals. To put it in shall, people should try for successful life. People should effort again and again and attain you goals They can worker day and night for acheive anything. People sould not depent other people.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You address both views and give a clear final preference for trying to improve one’s circumstances: “people should try for successful life.” The example about your sister also supports the view that persistence can lead to achievement. However, the discussion is only partially developed. The acceptance view is described mainly as people being content with low pay, without explaining why accepting a difficult situation might be sensible, such as when change is risky or beyond someone’s control. The improvement view is also asserted more than explained, and the conclusion introduces ideas about working day and night and not depending on others without developing them. Explain the reasons behind each view and support them with more specific examples.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, separate paragraphs beginning “On the one hand” and “On the other hand,” and a conclusion. These markers help readers identify the two perspectives, and the sister example is placed in the relevant paragraph. However, progression within paragraphs is limited, and several ideas repeat rather than build on one another—for example, the conclusion repeats that people should struggle and achieve their goals. Some links are unclear, particularly “There are both beneficial for humans,” which does not specify what “both” refers to. Use clearer topic sentences, connect each reason to its explanation or example, and avoid repeating the same point in the conclusion.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “lack of money,” “difficulties,” “achieve,” and “goals,” so the main subject is generally understandable. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate, sometimes making meaning difficult to follow. For instance, “try for successful and enhance like condition” does not clearly express improving one’s circumstances, while “accept the good and bad states” is imprecise. Spelling errors such as “stuggle,” “failer,” and “acheive” also reduce accuracy. Build a set of natural phrases for discussing work, finances, and change, and check spelling and word forms carefully. Prefer precise expressions such as “improve their circumstances” and “struggle to achieve a goal.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences, including a conditional idea in “if you want some thing so you are face many difficulties.” However, the range is limited, and errors in sentence construction, verb forms, agreement, and articles occur frequently enough to make some sentences difficult to understand. Examples include “they does not try,” “my sister want,” and “they are try again”; these need forms such as “they do not try,” “my sister wanted,” and “they try again.” There are also problems joining clauses, as in “When people should achieve some thing so they are try again.” Practise forming accurate simple sentences first, then combine them with clear clauses using “because,” “although,” or “if.” Check subject–verb agreement and tense consistency.

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