Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-10-26

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

In current time, many people believe that it is good to accept a bad situation. for instance, an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. While, other argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Therfore, ahead my opinion, both the views are disucussed further.

Commenting uopn the former view, many unemployed person are though the any type of job are gives money for the basic life and matrials. If employ are face several difficulties and bad situation they accept the time and work on unsatisfactory job for better finacial conditions. As a result, and of the day they have a money for the need. While, unsatisfactory job are sometime creat a good oppertunities in their perticuler field and giver a practical knowlwdge. its a banificial for personal growth also. Moreover, shoerted of money are some time significant role in faver of unsatisfactory job. Such as, many students after graduating fined a job but mnay time their requirment are not fullfill but they have no option for other jobs that time students continues to the unsatisfied job for practical knowledge and expriance.

Analysing the latter view, such people are try to improve bad situation and better job for their satisfaction and comfert zone also. Many employss are try to better improvement and improve situation by good and friendly enviorment their profesional place. Thier are always sick the gain more knowledge and experince. As a result, they learn a many new things and also helped in promotions for the higher position.

To conclude and offere my opinion, many time needy persone have best to accept a bad stiuation. While, always best to try improve such situation for better live life.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You address both views: the first body paragraph explains why people may remain in an unsatisfactory job, while the second describes efforts to improve working conditions and gain promotion. However, the discussion is only partially developed. The examples about graduates accepting jobs and employees seeking promotion are relevant, but their connection to the shortage-of-money situation and the broader arguments is not always clear. Your own position appears mainly in the conclusion—“needy persone have best to accept” but it is “always best to try improve”—and these claims are not reconciled, so the reader cannot identify a consistent opinion. Develop each view with a clear reason and example, then state which approach you support and under what circumstances. The response meets the required length; 11 words copied from the task prompt were excluded from the count.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, separate paragraphs for the two views, and a conclusion. This helps the reader see the intended discussion. However, progression within paragraphs is often difficult to follow because ideas are loosely connected or repeated. For example, the first body paragraph moves from basic income to practical knowledge and then back to money without clearly explaining how these points relate. Linking expressions such as “As a result,” and “Moreover” are attempted, but some are used inaccurately or do not show a clear relationship between the ideas. The conclusion also introduces two competing claims rather than bringing the discussion together. Use topic sentences, organise each paragraph around one main reason, and make links between examples and claims explicit.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You attempt vocabulary relevant to employment and personal development, including “unsatisfactory job,” “practical knowledge,” “financial conditions,” and “promotions.” These choices show an effort to discuss the topic rather than relying only on very basic words. However, the range is limited and frequent spelling errors and inaccurate word choices make parts of the response difficult to understand, as in “oppertunities,” “comfert zone,” and “sick the gain.” Some phrases are also unnatural, such as “shorted of money are some time significant role” and “better live life.” Learn accurate topic collocations and check spelling carefully. For example, use “seek to gain more experience” rather than “sick the gain more knowledge,” and “improve their quality of life” rather than “better live life.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt some longer sentences and use clauses beginning with “While” and “If,” as well as cause-and-effect structures. However, the range is limited, and complex sentences are often faulty, so the reader must work to understand the intended meaning. For example, “many unemployed person are though the any type of job are gives money” has problems with agreement and sentence structure, while “If employ are face several difficulties” does not form a correct conditional clause. There are also frequent errors with articles, plurals, verb forms, and punctuation, including sentence openings after full stops written in lowercase. Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then combine them using one clear subordinate clause. Check subject–verb agreement and verb forms in every sentence.

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