Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-10-26

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Accepting every condition, which could be unsatisfactory in terms of job or shortage of money, is now a common thing among people, however improving situatin, which is not satisfactroy, is also very familier to people. Accepting bad situation can help people to be happy at the same time it can be a major barrier for ensuring better life, while improving bad situations can help people to make a good future but can also creats extra pressure.

Accepting every situation, which is not satisfactroy, has many advantages like making people happy, helping to start from the firts step etc. In contrast, it has sevarel disadvantages like making barrier for ensuring better job. Firstly, accepting a situation can make people happy. In modern generation everyone try but when a person fail then he can not accept the situation that's why he never feel happy. When a person accept a condition with whatever he has then he can be happy. Secondly, it help people to start a work from first step. In most cases when a person fails then he do not start the work again the quit it but when a person accept that condition he can feel it is normal and he can start the work from first stage. On the other hand, it can be a barrier for ensuring a better life. When a person accept a situation but he does not try to get a better job then he never makes a better future.

In contrast, improving bad situation also has many advantages like it helps people to make a good future. When a person has a job but that job does not give him a good selary then he can try to get a better job for improving his condition. However, this situation also can creat some problems like creating extra pressure. When a person always try to get better then he always feels stress and he never feels happy.

In conclusion, acceptin every situation and improvin bad situation both have advantages and disadvantages.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You discuss both accepting an unsatisfactory situation and trying to improve it, and you give relevant reasons: acceptance may bring happiness, while seeking a better job may improve someone’s future but create stress. However, the response only partially fulfils the task because your own opinion is not clearly stated. The conclusion merely says that both approaches have advantages and disadvantages, so the reader cannot tell which view you support or when you think each is preferable. Several points are also under-developed: for example, the claim that acceptance helps someone “start the work from first stage” is repeated without a clear, specific illustration. State your position directly and explain it with a developed example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, separate paragraphs on the two views, and a conclusion. This helps the reader follow the broad topic. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes repetitive: the first body paragraph lists advantages and disadvantages, then repeats the same points using “Firstly” and “Secondly.” Linking phrases such as “In contrast” and “On the other hand” are used, but their relationships are not always clear; for instance, “In contrast” introduces another advantage of improving a situation rather than a direct contrast. The conclusion also does not bring the discussion to a clear position. Organise each paragraph around one main claim, develop it once, and use linking expressions only where their meaning fits.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use enough topic-related vocabulary to communicate the main ideas, including “unsatisfactory,” “barrier,” “pressure,” and “better future.” However, the range is limited and several words or phrases are repeated, particularly “situation,” “accept,” and “better.” There are also noticeable spelling and word-choice errors, such as “situatin,” “satisfactroy,” “selary,” and “familier,” which can distract the reader. Some combinations are unnatural, including “ensuring better job” and “start a work from first step.” Aim to use more precise collocations and check spelling carefully. For example, you could describe “seeking a higher-paying job” or “taking the first step again” to express these ideas more naturally.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentences, including clauses with “when” and “but,” so the response shows some structural variety. However, complex sentences are often faulty, and frequent errors sometimes make the reader work to understand the meaning. Examples include “everyone try,” “he never feel happy,” and “it help people,” where subject–verb agreement is missing. Verb forms are also inaccurate in “he do not start” and “it can also creats”; after “does not” or “can,” use the base form. Articles and sentence boundaries need attention too, as in “accepting bad situation” and the long opening sentence joined with “however.” Practise checking agreement, verb forms, and punctuation in each sentence.

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