Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-10-27

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

In life people face different situations and number of people have various ways to handle that time. One group of people believes that individuls should accept and co-oparat with situations like job which they do not like or money crices While, other group is not agree with that, they argue that people should try somthing to improve situation. I will elaborated both opinion in further paragraphs, along with my opinion.

Among all reasons why people should accept the bad situations, the main one is that acceptance is gives person mental stability. Some situation is not under control by human at that situaten it is batter to adapte that time and take experiance rather than wasting energy to change it. Adapting a money issue teach people carful spendin money on things. As result, individual can save more money and improve their financial standerd. For example, if some one lost their peoperty in crices and then accept the situation and live wisely so the can live happily. Moreover, acceptance id end stage of grif process so in the end it is very important to admit the situation.

In contrast, other believes for improving the situation person can do somthin. By tring somthing new and taking a rike can gives the great sucess in life. In financial terms, if people try to earn more money and work heard for that it may be emprove condition. people feel setisfied when they try to improve situation because sucess and failuar is all depands on luck but trying is matters a lot.

In my opinion, do intervention for iproving the situation is way bater than acceptance because it have more chance of success.

In conclusion, The person who accept situation can get pease of mind and stability, on the othere hand people can feel setisfied and chance more success by trying to comeout the situation. I support tring to improve situation rather than accept it

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address both views and state a clear preference for trying to improve a situation, especially in “do intervention for improving the situation is way better than acceptance.” The discussion of acceptance includes relevant points about mental stability and learning to manage money, while the opposing view mentions effort and the possibility of success. However, the ideas are only partly developed: the example about losing property is difficult to follow, and the argument that success depends on luck is not explained or connected clearly to your position. The conclusion repeats the two sides but does not add much support. To strengthen the response, explain the circumstances in which acceptance is sensible and give a specific, clearly linked example of how action can improve a situation.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a clear overall structure: an introduction, separate paragraphs for the two views, your opinion, and a conclusion. Transitions such as “In contrast,” “Moreover,” and “In conclusion” help readers follow the discussion, and the main position is easy to locate. This meets the lower-band expectation of coherent organisation and shows some stronger progression. However, links between ideas are sometimes mechanical or unclear. For example, “success and failure is all depends on luck but trying is matters a lot” combines contrasting points without explaining their relationship, while the example in the acceptance paragraph is hard to connect to the preceding claim. Use clearer referencing and develop each paragraph around a sequence of claim, explanation, and example.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “mental stability,” “financial,” “acceptance,” and “improve,” so the reader can generally identify the subject and your main ideas. However, the range is limited and several inaccurate word choices, word forms, and spelling errors make parts difficult to understand. Examples include “money crices,” “adapt that time,” “financial standerd,” and “comeout the situation.” Some phrases also sound unnatural, such as “do intervention for improving.” Aim to learn topic-related collocations as complete phrases and check spelling and word forms carefully. More precise language would help you explain the difference between accepting what cannot be changed and taking practical steps to improve what can.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including a conditional example beginning “if people try to earn more money,” and you use clauses to explain reasons. However, the range is limited, and errors occur frequently enough to make some sentences difficult to follow. For instance, “acceptance is gives person mental stability” has an incorrect verb construction and missing article, while “it may be improve condition” has a faulty verb form and singular noun pattern. Agreement is also inconsistent in “success and failure is all depends.” Practise building accurate sentences with one main clause and a subordinate clause, then check subject–verb agreement, articles, and verb forms. Clearer sentence boundaries and punctuation would also improve readability.

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