Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-10-27

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Some individuals thinks that it is ideal to accept a horrible situation ,for example an bad job or a unsufficient amount of fund and on the other hand some residents thinks that they should improve about this matter and try to learn from the failures subjects.

The individuals who accpted the worst situation they have learned something.People can have a unsatisfactory job or any hilarious job but that doesnt mean they are failure or something.It always have a good impact. People learn in many ways from failures to success.Accepting everything means to learn everything .One learn from mistakes.Money is not everything.An irrelevant job or insufficiency of funds have to be accepted by all the peoples.Not everyone get the same good jobs.People learn from everything and get knowlege.It is very useful.

On the other hand, other say that it is relevant to accept and improve such situations.Which i think it is the best thing because acceptance is the main key to success in everything.To be talented in everything it is okay accept failures.Situation which are awful people should learn from that situations.Situations can be bad or good people should be learn from everything.

In last step i want ti mention people should learn from the bad situations like unsatisfactory job or fund and people learn and improve from their situations.One thing i want to mention is failure is the pillar of success.And people should learn from bad or irrevelant situations.People get a lot of oppurtunities and they should accept the bad and good situations.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You refer to both accepting difficult circumstances and trying to improve them, and you give a personal view when you say improvement is “the best thing.” However, the discussion does not clearly explain the two positions as distinct views. Much of the first body paragraph shifts from accepting a situation to learning from failure, while the second repeats that people should learn from bad situations rather than explaining practical ways to improve them. Claims such as “Money is not everything” and “failure is the pillar of success” are relevant in a broad sense, but they are not supported with a specific reason or example. Develop each side separately, then state clearly whether acceptance or action is preferable and why.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The response has an opening, two main sections signalled by “On the other hand,” and a concluding paragraph beginning “In last step,” so there is an attempt to organise the answer. However, ideas are not arranged in a clear progression: the first paragraph moves between jobs, money, failure and learning without showing how each point supports acceptance. The second paragraph largely repeats the same message, and the conclusion introduces no clear synthesis. Linking phrases such as “On the other hand” and “One thing i want to mention” are used, but they do not establish precise relationships between ideas. Group related points into focused paragraphs and use clear references and transitions to show contrast, explanation and example.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “unsatisfactory job,” “acceptance,” “failures,” and “opportunities.” However, the range is basic and repetitive, particularly in repeated uses of “learn,” “situations,” and “bad.” Several word choices or collocations are inaccurate or unclear, such as “hilarious job,” “irrelevant job,” “improve about this matter,” and “an unsufficient amount of fund.” Spelling errors, including “accpted,” “knowlege,” and “oppurtunities,” also reduce accuracy. These choices sometimes make the intended point difficult to follow. Build a more precise set of terms for employment and financial hardship, and check spelling and collocations when editing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The writing relies mainly on short, simple statements, with limited control of more complex sentence forms. Errors occur frequently in agreement, articles, verb forms and sentence construction: for example, “Some individuals thinks” should use a plural verb, and “It always have a good impact” has an agreement error. In “Which i think it is the best thing,” the clause is not formed correctly, while “people should be learn” uses an incorrect verb pattern. Punctuation and capitalisation are also inconsistent, as in “situations ,for example” and the lowercase “i.” These errors sometimes obscure relationships between ideas. Practise accurate simple sentences first, then add controlled clauses using “because,” “although” and “while.”

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