Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-10-28

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

It is often argued that, some people think that, accepting a bad situation an unsatisfied job or shortage of good for them. Others think that we should try to fight with those situations.

As per my perspective, people should not rely on unsatisfactory job or shortage of money, people should struggle to deal with the situation of shortage of money.

To begin with, person should not accept a bad situation as good they have to be struggler to increase their skill to master, so they do not want to be relied on low paying jobs. The can achieve this by doing smartwork but they do hardwork instead of smartwork. One shouldhave self confidence in him to master in skill. Thats why they an achieve success.

On the other hand, some person thinks that being a low wage earner is good. As we are getting the salary each month so we can satisfy our basic needs in that. I keep on doing this type of job and thinking of increase in salary within two years. For instance if you are doing the job in the company at intermidiate skill the employer will think he is doing the work, as i have to teach him more but thats of no use, person is doing repeated tasks every day and he is not grasping anything new fromthat job.

It is cocluded that there is a way to tackle bad situation and find a solution to it. People should not think of satisfying their basic needs, they should think of build their carrier in future.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You give a clear general preference for improving difficult circumstances, especially when you write that people should “struggle to deal with” a shortage of money and build their careers. You also mention the opposing view that a regular salary can meet basic needs. However, the discussion is only partial: the acceptance viewpoint is not explained as fully as the improvement viewpoint, and the example about an employee repeating tasks is difficult to connect to accepting a bad situation. Your position also shifts slightly between advising people to improve their circumstances and describing someone who waits for a salary increase. Develop both views with clear reasons, then state consistently when acceptance may be sensible and why you ultimately favour change.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has an introduction, separate body paragraphs signalled by “To begin with” and “On the other hand,” and a concluding sentence, so there is some basic organisation. However, progression within paragraphs is often unclear: the first body paragraph moves from skill development to “smartwork” and confidence without showing how each point connects. The second paragraph combines the benefits of a steady salary with an example about an employer and repetitive tasks, making the relationship between ideas hard to follow. Some linking phrases are used mechanically, and references such as “this type of job” and “that” are not always precise. Group each paragraph around one main view, explain the reason, and use a relevant example that directly supports it.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some topic-related vocabulary, including “shortage of money,” “low paying jobs,” “salary,” and “basic needs,” which helps communicate the general subject. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations make meaning unclear, such as “accepting a bad situation an unsatisfied job,” “fight with those situations,” and “increase their skill to master.” There are also noticeable spelling and word-form errors, including “intermidiate,” “cocluded,” and “carrier.” These issues sometimes make the reader pause to interpret your meaning. Build a bank of accurate phrases for employment and financial hardship, and check spelling and collocations when revising; for example, use “improve their skills” rather than “increase their skill to master.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentence forms, including a sentence beginning “As we are getting the salary each month” and a conditional example beginning “if you are doing the job.” However, complex attempts are often faulty, and frequent errors can make relationships between ideas difficult to understand. Examples include the comma splice in “people should not rely on unsatisfactory job or shortage of money, people should struggle,” missing or incorrect articles in “a bad situation as good,” and agreement or verb-form problems in “some person thinks” and “they an achieve success.” Sentence boundaries and punctuation are also inconsistent. Practise building accurate sentences with one main clause and a clearly connected subordinate clause, then check articles, subject–verb agreement, and punctuation.

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