Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-10-28

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Today many of people face the problems of poverty and uncertain type of jobs , that is a very streanful for the indivisdules.Therefore often many people believe that this type of circumstances is best and satisified for them.while the others thinks it should be improve for the better development of best environment for the people life.In my opinion,uncertian type of stutions is a stuiton in which people feel less about their job tilte and their budget.addtionlly the also spend more time with their family .while the way of improving these circumstances is also make people confident to step foward their promotion and also make people more energetic and serious about their job,consequently its result is better then the accpet the these situations .

On the one hand, the having of finicial and uncertain type of jobs have own prospective.In this kind of circumstances people is feel less strain and they have not anxiety of any fimiler stutions.They enjoy their life in a certain way and feel more happy.Morelike this , they also have a more chance to spend a time with their job.in this way, their home environment also grow up better .For example ,if a person spend all of his time in office work and at night when he came back so he feel very bad and stress, so following this there is no chance for him to spend a good and happier moments with his family .

On the other side, the attempt to better and improve these kind of situations is more beneficial for crucial aspects of people life.In this way, they have a chance to promote themselves. when they work hard and try to their best its a more chance for thier promotion and feel more confident about their job.following this its also invent a chance for the people energy and more curious about their tasks.people also feel more energetic and they have more cnfident in this way .

In conclusion, not having the good jobs and proverty people feel less stress and anxiety.moreover they spend a good time with family.In contrast,the attempts to imporve this also make people promotions their job title and they feel more energetic and curious about their job or carrier. Therefore, i opt for improving the way of these such circumstances .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You discuss both views and state a clear preference for trying to improve difficult circumstances, especially in the conclusion: “i opt for improving” them. You also give relevant reasons, including reduced stress and more family time for accepting a situation, and confidence or promotion for making changes. However, the position is not consistently clear in the introduction, where the wording about which circumstances are “best and satisified” is difficult to interpret. Several points are asserted rather than explained—for example, how accepting a situation leads to a better home environment, or how effort results in promotion. Develop each view with a clearer cause-and-effect explanation and a specific, relevant example to address the task more fully.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable overall structure: an introduction, separate paragraphs for the two views, and a conclusion. This helps the reader follow the broad direction of the discussion. You also use signposts such as “On the one hand,” “On the other side,” and “In conclusion.” However, connections between ideas are sometimes mechanical or unclear, and several sentences run together, particularly in the introduction. Repeated references to stress, family time, and energy also limit progression. Some linking phrases, such as “following this,” do not clearly show the relationship between the ideas. Use shorter, clearly punctuated sentences and make each paragraph progress from a main point to an explanation and example; use pronouns and linking expressions only when their reference is clear.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “poverty,” “anxiety,” “promotion,” and “confident,” and you try to express ideas about employment and family life. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations make meaning difficult to follow, such as “uncertain type of jobs,” “the having of finicial,” and “invent a chance.” Spelling errors—including “streanful,” “indivisdules,” and “proverty”—are noticeable and sometimes obscure the intended word. Build a reliable set of topic phrases and check spelling and word forms carefully. Prefer precise, natural expressions such as “job insecurity,” “financial hardship,” and “create opportunities for advancement,” rather than translating ideas word by word.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentences, including a conditional example beginning “if a person spend all of his time in office work.” However, complex structures are often faulty, and errors in agreement, verb forms, articles, and sentence boundaries frequently make the reader work to understand the meaning. For instance, “people is feel” should be “people feel,” while “when he came back so he feel” mixes verb forms and has an unclear clause structure. The opening also joins several sentences without appropriate capitalisation or punctuation. Practise building accurate subject–verb–object sentences first, then add one subordinate clause at a time. Check agreement and tense consistency, and use full stops to separate complete ideas.

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