Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-10-28

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

For several years, it is seen that people with never giving up attitude have succesed in there lifes. There is a arguement between two groups of individuals that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money and others believe that it is better to try and improve such situations. I partial with the second arguement.

To begin, generally life is unpredictable where in life challanges comes in each face of life and accepting a bad situation could be mature decesion due to the responsability not resign and continous their unsatisfactory job for family regard less of how the job is bad. In addition, now-a-days still most of the people work at a place just to provide their family better life where there is no choice to make there own decesion. Further more, if every individuald be selfish and make decesion of there own then so many families could be suffer so sometimes accepting a bad situation is right choice.

On the other hand, life is challangeing where anything could happen in person life it could be a positive or negative thing but a person cannot have give up attitude because life is unfair sometimes so person should always have a positive attitude to succesed in life. In addition, if a person accept bad situation nothing would be change because you live once so better to try and give your best and try to improve ruther then focusing on accepting bad situations. Further more, if every person have the same attitude than all this multi nation companies would not exitis because at one time every successful person have failed ex: Bill gates, Elon mask and etc. They all have succesed in there lifes due never giveup attitude and improve such situations.

In conclusion, I believe some people have a choice to make there own decesion and some are stuck in a responsability cycle where they have no choice to make there own decesion and they accept bad situatiion but if a person try to improve it could be the best decesion he/she could ever made.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You address both views and state a clear preference for trying to improve difficult circumstances: “I partial with the second arguement.” The discussion of acceptance is relevant, especially the point that people may stay in unsatisfactory work to support their families. You also give examples of people who persisted after failure. However, some ideas are asserted rather than explained: the claim that people would be selfish if they made their own decisions needs clearer reasoning, and the examples of Bill Gates and Elon Musk are named without showing how their experiences support your argument. Your conclusion recognises that people’s responsibilities affect their choices, but could restate your position more decisively. Develop each main point with a specific explanation or example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a clear overall structure: an introduction, separate paragraphs for the two views, and a conclusion. The contrast between “To begin” and “On the other hand” helps readers follow the discussion, and the main ideas are generally grouped by viewpoint. However, linking phrases such as “In addition” and “Further more” are used repeatedly, making the progression somewhat mechanical. Some references are also unclear, as in “if every individuald be selfish” and “all this multi nation companies,” where the connection to the preceding point is difficult to follow. Improve cohesion by varying transitions, using pronouns with clear referents, and arranging each paragraph around one central claim followed by explanation and support.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “unpredictable,” “responsibility,” “unsatisfactory job,” and “positive attitude.” These choices help communicate the main ideas, but the range is limited and several word-choice, collocation, and spelling errors reduce precision. For example, “I partial with” is not a natural way to express your position, while “give up attitude” and “responsibility cycle” are awkward in context. Frequent misspellings such as “succesed,” “challangeing,” and “decesion” also distract the reader. Build a more accurate set of phrases for discussing perseverance, financial pressure, and family obligations, and check spelling carefully. More precise vocabulary would make your arguments clearer and less repetitive.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You use both simple statements and attempts at longer, complex sentences, including clauses introduced by “where,” “because,” and “if.” This gives the response some structural variety, and the overall meaning is usually recoverable. However, errors in sentence construction and grammatical forms are common enough to make several sentences difficult to read. For instance, “life challanges comes in each face of life” has problems with agreement and clause structure, and “if every person have the same attitude” uses an incorrect verb form. Articles and plurals are also inconsistent, as in “a arguement” and “multi nation companies.” Practise building accurate complex sentences, especially conditional clauses, and proofread for subject–verb agreement, articles, and sentence boundaries.

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