Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-10-28

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

In recent times, poppulation try to adjust in tough time rather try to improve it. such as, unsatisfactory job or shortage of money due to this heated debate is going on the other side that it is better to ry and improve such situations. this essay will discuss in side of improving factor with my own perspective.

Nowdays, citizens got comfortable in life and they eaither scared to make some change or they did not get equal output when they make efforts. For instance, Factory worker got responsibilties of his or his family and to make changes he had to have backup. in this ecominic crisis they only got minimu wage and due to this they are scared to make changes without security or backup.

On the other hand, some belive it is neccesary to try and work on situation because every individual has responsibilites but they need to meet their family fulfillments. learning new things is easy and avaible for free to learn that is the major advantage to change situations. For example, there are many citizens of india that are trying to change their financial situation by getting uncomfortable or learning new things such as one influencer was from slum area and did not had any expertise but by making content, learning acting he became well know is india known as rohit zinzurke with 25 million followers and reach the bar of wealth at the age of 23.

From my perspective, it is crucial to try to stable in life so individual can fulfill his and family dreams as well as desires. There are various resources available in recent era to educate on any area of life so citizens should grab this opportunity.

To sum up, citizens should develop desire to make some changes in life that lead to better future and try for their own good.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You address both views and make your own position clear: the opening says the essay will support improving difficult situations, and the conclusion urges people to seek a better future. The discussion of accepting hardship is relevant, especially the factory worker who may fear losing financial security, while the example of Rohit Zinzurke supports the possibility of improving one’s circumstances through learning and content creation. However, the first view is less fully explained, and some claims—such as people being “comfortable in life”—are not clearly connected to accepting a bad situation. Develop the reasons on both sides more evenly and explain how each example demonstrates the point.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, separate paragraphs for the two views, a personal opinion, and a conclusion. Transitions such as “On the other hand,” “For instance,” and “To sum up” help readers follow the main stages. However, some links between ideas are unclear or mechanical. In the opening, “due to this heated debate is going on the other side” makes the relationship between the views difficult to follow, and the first body paragraph moves from fear of change to family responsibilities without clearly explaining the connection. Use topic sentences that state each paragraph’s main point, then connect examples explicitly to that point. Clearer referencing would also help readers track who “they” and “he” refer to.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “unsatisfactory job,” “shortage of money,” “financial situation,” “responsibilities,” and “resources.” These choices make the general subject understandable. However, the range is limited and several noticeable spelling and word-choice errors reduce precision, for example “poppulation,” “ecominic crisis,” “minimum wage,” and “stable in life.” Some phrases are also unnatural, such as “meet their family fulfillments” and “reach the bar of wealth.” Aim for accurate collocations and more precise expressions when describing financial insecurity, taking risks, and improving one’s prospects. Proofreading spelling and word forms would make your ideas easier to read.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including a conditional idea in “to make changes he had to have backup” and a relative clause in “resources available … to educate on any area of life.” However, control is inconsistent, and errors in sentence boundaries, verb forms, articles, and agreement sometimes make the meaning difficult to follow. For example, “Factory worker got responsibilities” needs a clearer subject and tense, while “one influencer … did not had any expertise” has an incorrect verb form. The opening also joins several ideas with full stops and commas in ways that obscure their relationships. Practise building complete sentences with accurate tense and agreement, and use punctuation to separate each main idea.

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