Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-10-28

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

It is our common dream that we spend a life which is full of facilities and modern life style but due to economic crises throughout the world this topic is under discussion in several plateforms. Majority of the people believe that due to unemployment rises in a world as time passing we need to accomodate in any kind of low income job now adays. Some school of thoughts shows other opinion that we should need to improve our life standards by hardwork and skills. In my views i strongly believe that we can upgrade our economically value by personal development because its necessary to provide our family a good life.

The main reason that i support this statement about try to get improve such situation because its requiremnt for personal growth for economical aspects. We need to improve our skills and match according to trending skills in a job industry. To get better job or opportunity in life we must adopt and trained ourself to equipt with most vital educational and research based skills. This helps to in job security and economic as well as personal growth.

The other reason in my point of views is that by accepting low income job sometimes feels relaxation and job security but it will ruin job carrer because in low budget person will never learn or trained themselves with trending job skills. Financial crises sometimes breaks family relationship because of economic straits makes unable to fulfill basic needs of family. By adopting low income job crack your confidence level and personal growth will stops.

In Conclusion to competency and hardworking opens the doors for the skilled person to get a job of their own requirement which provide them fianancial stability. It becomes also effective to secure job and growth of country as well.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You give a clear opinion that people should improve their circumstances through personal development, and you offer relevant reasons, including job security, family needs and confidence. However, the discussion is weighted heavily towards your own view: the case for accepting a difficult situation is only briefly acknowledged in the third paragraph, where you mention relaxation and job security, without explaining when acceptance might be sensible or beneficial. Some supporting claims, such as low-paid work preventing people from learning skills, are broad and need a specific example or qualification. To strengthen the response, explain both perspectives more evenly, then connect your examples directly to the reasons and make your position consistent throughout.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, two body paragraphs and a conclusion. Ideas generally follow a sensible order, and phrases such as “The main reason” and “The other reason” signal the progression. However, the second body paragraph continues to argue for improvement rather than developing the opposing view, so the organisation does not fully reflect the two-sided task. Some links are mechanical, and references such as “this statement” are not always precise. The conclusion introduces “competency and hardworking” without clearly summarising the two views. Use one body paragraph for each perspective, link each claim to its explanation, and make the conclusion restate your balanced discussion and opinion.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You attempt vocabulary relevant to employment and economic circumstances, including “job security,” “personal development,” “financial stability” and “economic crises.” These choices show an effort to use topic-specific language. However, a limited range of inaccurate word choices, collocations and spelling errors sometimes make the meaning difficult to follow. Examples include “economically value,” “crack your confidence level,” “job carrer” and “trending skills”; several phrases do not express the intended idea naturally. Spelling errors such as “plateforms,” “accomodate” and “fianancial” also reduce accuracy. Build a bank of natural employment-related collocations and check word forms and spelling; precise, familiar expressions are more effective than awkward attempts at advanced phrasing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and complex sentences, including a reason clause beginning “because” and a conditional idea with “sometimes.” However, the range is limited, and complex sentences are often faulty, with frequent errors that can make relationships between ideas unclear. For example, “Majority of the people believe that due to unemployment rises in a world as time passing…” lacks a clear grammatical structure, while “This helps to in job security” has an incomplete verb pattern. There are also problems with articles, agreement and sentence construction, as in “a life which is full of facilities” and “personal growth will stops.” Practise building accurate subject–verb–object sentences first, then add subordinate clauses and check agreement and verb forms.

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