Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-10-29

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Some Individual argue that it is best to agree a bad situation,such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others belive that it is better to try and imprve such situation.

Some people think it is better to accepte a difficult situation, like a bad job or lack of money, instead of complaining. Others belive that we should work hard to change and improve such situation. This eassy will discuss both views and argue that making an effort to improve is much better.

However, Accept a bad situation reduce stress and make you mental peace such as a bad job give you tention every time and make your health distrub also no money big problem when you don't have money you have nothing fainacial issues made by no cash low salary and high stress it's make your life awful.

Therefore, Improve a bad situation gives you growth. And you learn more skills high salary if the salary is low you should learn another skill and choose another job whats have good salary this is my opinion don't give stress to your self make your self better due to that you can do everything whatever you want to do make a good decision it's reduce your health problems and make you good in cash one more thing it's also help you in your family issues have a good skill make more money.

In conclusion, both have benefits but improments is a best way due to that you learn new skill and fight with bad situation.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You give a clear opinion that improving a difficult situation is preferable, and you mention both views: accepting a bad situation may reduce stress, while trying to improve can bring skills and better pay. However, the discussion is brief and the reasons are not sufficiently explained or supported with a specific example, so the task is only partially developed. The first paragraph repeats the prompt rather than advancing the response, and the conclusion mainly restates your position. The response contains 243 words, below the required 250; the 13 words copied from the prompt were not counted. Develop each view with a clear explanation and a relevant example, and ensure the response meets the minimum length.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, separate paragraphs for the two views, and a conclusion. This helps the reader identify your main position. However, progression within the body paragraphs is weak: the paragraph beginning “However” moves rapidly from stress to health and financial problems, while the next combines skills, salary, personal advice, and family issues without clear links. Connectors such as “However,” “Therefore,” and “In conclusion” are present, but some are used mechanically or do not clearly show the relationship between ideas. The opening also repeats the task before introducing the essay plan. Group related points, use clearer transitions, and make each paragraph develop one central idea.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “unsatisfactory job,” “shortage of money,” “stress,” “skills,” and “salary,” so the main subject is generally understandable. However, the range is limited and several word-choice, spelling, and collocation errors make parts difficult to follow, such as “make you mental peace,” “nothing fainacial issues,” and “make you good in cash.” Repetition of “bad situation,” “money,” and “good” also limits precision. Aim to use accurate, natural phrases for describing financial pressure and personal development, and check spelling carefully. More precise vocabulary would help express your reasons without relying on repeated or unclear wording.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences, and the reader can usually identify your intended meaning. However, grammatical errors are frequent and sometimes make relationships between ideas unclear. For example, “Accept a bad situation reduce stress” has an incorrect verb form and agreement, while “Improve a bad situation gives you growth” has a similar problem. Longer constructions such as “when you don't have money you have nothing…” lack clear sentence boundaries, and punctuation is often missing or inconsistent. Articles and sentence structure also need attention. Practise building accurate subject–verb–object sentences first, then add subordinate clauses with correct punctuation; this will make your explanations easier to understand.

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