Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-10-29

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

I think it depends on your thought and skill that you may accept the bad situation or leave as it is and on the other hand you can do both as you solve the problm and also accept it. Here first i will analyze the both statements and at the end i will put my opinion.

First of all i will explain the people who think that it is best to accept the bad situation, such as unsatisfactory job and shortage of money. As these types of people let go these situations and remain constant in current situation or problem. They do not try to overcom these problems for instance you are doing tough jobs in wich you do not have enough interest and it may difficult and stressfull job in the result you are suffring from your health and do not pay much attention on your daily routines you should think to change your job. Because for doing your job you should be attentive physically and mentally. As without your job you cannot even survive in this modern era where every thing is out of cost. The money is also important for survival as jobs both are important you cannot ignore both.

On the other hand the people who has desire to earn money and want to live better life they always try to get solution of problem not only in money in any problems of life as in education, health issues ,financial problems.jobs problem infact problems in their relationships they may not let go always try to find the solution.

To sum up i always spport those people who finds the solution of ay type of problem. It is very important to get better life.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You give a clear preference for trying to solve problems in the conclusion, and the examples of an unhealthy, stressful job and financial pressure are relevant to the topic. However, the discussion of accepting a bad situation is not fully explained: you mainly describe people who accept it as remaining stuck, without considering why acceptance might sometimes be sensible, such as when change is not immediately possible. The second view is also presented broadly, with a list of areas where people seek solutions rather than a developed example. Your opening says a person can both accept and solve a problem, but this position is not clarified or supported in the body. Develop each view with a reason and a specific example, then state your position consistently.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has an introduction, separate paragraphs for the two views, and a conclusion, so the reader can identify its basic structure. Linking phrases such as “First of all,” “On the other hand,” and “To sum up” help signal the stages of the discussion. However, progression within paragraphs is often difficult to follow: the first body paragraph moves from accepting a job situation to changing jobs and then to the importance of money, without clearly connecting these points. The opening also promises an analysis that the essay does not clearly deliver, and the conclusion is very brief. Use one main idea per paragraph, connect each example explicitly to the view it supports, and use clearer referencing to avoid abrupt shifts.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant topic vocabulary, including “unsatisfactory job,” “shortage of money,” “survive,” and “financial problems,” which makes the subject clear. There are also attempts to express more complex ideas, such as “overcome these problems” and “find the solution.” However, the range is limited and several phrases are inaccurate or unnatural, including “get solution of problem,” “out of cost,” and “let go these situations.” Spelling errors such as “problm,” “stressfull,” and “suffring” are noticeable and sometimes slow the reader. Build a more precise set of collocations for discussing choices and consequences, and check spelling carefully. For example, use “seek a solution” rather than “get solution of problem.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentences, including a conditional example beginning “if you are doing tough jobs,” and you use some subordinate clauses to explain consequences. However, complex sentences are often difficult to control, and frequent errors affect clarity. For example, “the people who has desire” has subject–verb disagreement, while “you should think to change your job” uses an incorrect verb pattern. The opening sentence combines several ideas without a clear grammatical structure, and punctuation is often missing or misplaced, especially in the long first body paragraph. Practise building shorter, complete sentences first, then add subordinate clauses with accurate agreement, articles, and verb patterns. Clear sentence boundaries would make your reasoning easier to understand.

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