Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-10-29

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Many people in the society beileves that what ever the bad situation comes in live such as unsatisfactory job or shortage of money they will accept it. While others people will argued that it is better to try and over those suitation. In my opinion , while accepting the situation sometime make our lives easy reduce stress. It is always better to take action and improve over lives.

On the one hand accepting the bad situations had some benefits in lives and give peace of mind. Specially when a problem is hard to change, it better to accept the suituation. For example, when a person financial condition is bad and and unsatisfied with job but still able to pay the bills and able to have food ,clothes and shelter, searching for the new job is complex. Additionally, getting a job in this globalised market is difficult task. However, accepting the situation what ever we had will help them to lead stress free life and able to spent quality of time with family.

On the other hand, I believe we should always try to improve the condiion in our lives. If we accept the bad situation we will never grow or change. Many people in the society are successful because they try to change their situations amd workhard to achieve they goals.If we always accept the situation we will becaome complacent and may stuck in the same position forever. The change in the society happen because people try hard to change it. For example, acquiring a new job we should learn new skills will help us to get better position which will increases the salary of an individual and can change their future.

In conclusion, I think that accepting the bad suition will some times gives u peace of mind which is temporary. Therefore we should always try hard to change the and improve the situation. which help us to become successful in life

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You address both views and give a clear opinion: accepting a difficult situation may reduce stress, but taking action is ultimately better. The two body paragraphs are relevant, and the examples about financial security and learning new skills help explain your points. This meets the task well overall. However, the acceptance argument is more fully illustrated than analysed: the example explains why changing jobs can be difficult, but could clarify when acceptance is sensible rather than simply passive. The improvement argument would also benefit from a more specific example showing how someone’s actions led to a better outcome. To strengthen the response further, develop these ideas with more precise reasoning and make the distinction between temporary acceptance and long-term effort clearer.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a clear overall structure: an introduction, one paragraph for each view, and a conclusion. The progression from the benefits of acceptance to the case for change is easy to follow, and signposts such as “On the one hand,” “On the other hand,” and “In conclusion” help guide the reader. This is a sound foundation. At times, however, connections between sentences are mechanical or unclear. For example, “For example, acquiring a new job we should learn new skills” does not clearly link the example to the preceding claim. The conclusion’s final sentence also feels detached after “Therefore.” Use referencing and linking more precisely, and ensure each example is explicitly connected to the point it supports.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant topic vocabulary, including “shortage of money,” “financial condition,” “globalised market,” “complacent,” and “acquiring a new job.” These choices show an attempt to discuss employment, finances, and personal progress. However, the range is limited and several noticeable spelling and word-choice errors make parts of the response less clear, such as “suition,” “condiion,” “beileves,” and “over those suitation.” Some phrases are also unnatural, including “improve over lives” and “spent quality of time.” Aim to use accurate collocations and check spelling carefully. Building a small set of precise phrases for discussing financial hardship, career change, and personal development would make your ideas clearer and more natural.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including a conditional idea in “If we accept the bad situation we will never grow or change” and a contrast between the two views. However, control is inconsistent, and errors in sentence structure, agreement, verb forms, and punctuation sometimes make the reader work to understand the meaning. For instance, “Many people in the society beileves” has an agreement problem, while “accepting the bad situations had some benefits” shifts awkwardly between tense and number. The opening sentence is also difficult to follow because its clauses are not clearly connected. Practise forming complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, and check agreement, articles, and punctuation when editing.

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