Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-10-29

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

These days,few individuals believed that it is good to agreed with the bad circumstance like,non permanent job or less money.On the other hand,some people said that is important to try and changed such situations.In this essay,we discussed both view and make comparison relevant.

At first,few people thinks it is helpful to accept a bad situation,like poverty or unemployment.Therefore,such type of people didn't hard work and also they didn't have a specific goal.For example,those individuals who accept their bad faith and also lose their hope to become better who didn't achieved any thing in their life.The main reason of this condition is poverty and unemployment because when the young and educated person didn't find the job that why they lose hope and accept their situation.

To commense with,some people argue rhat it is beneficial to try and improve your situations because when the people have try and work hard to achieve their goals they become succesful in their mission.In addition,this type of people believed it was in the hand of people to hold his faith in his own hand and when they try they changed the life style of their families and become the independent and role model of other person.

In conclusion,some people who didn't try to change their situation such type of people remained left behind in the race of life.On the other hand those who try and changed their faith they become the role models of other.In my opinion,i strongly agreed with this it is in the hand of people to improve their lives.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address both views and state a clear preference in the conclusion: “I strongly agreed” with trying to improve one’s life. The discussion is relevant, especially the point that unemployment can cause people to lose hope. However, the two positions are not explored in a balanced or fully clear way. The case for accepting a difficult situation is presented mainly as a negative choice, with claims that people “didn't hard work” or lose hope, rather than explaining why acceptance might sometimes be sensible, such as protecting wellbeing or recognising limits. The argument for change is also general and lacks a specific supporting example. Develop the reasons behind each view and explain your own position more fully.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has an introduction, separate discussion paragraphs and a conclusion, so the reader can identify its broad structure. You also use signposts such as “On the other hand,” “In addition” and “In conclusion.” However, progression within paragraphs is often unclear: the first body paragraph moves from accepting poverty to unemployment and then to young educated people without clearly connecting each point. Some linking phrases are mechanical or do not express the relationship precisely, and the opening says “we discussed both view” without clearly previewing the argument. Referencing is also confusing in phrases such as “such type of people.” Organise each paragraph around one main reason, then explain and illustrate it before moving to the next point.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant topic vocabulary, including “poverty,” “unemployment,” “achieve their goals” and “role model,” which helps communicate the general subject. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate enough to make parts of the argument difficult to follow. Examples include “agreed with the bad circumstance,” “accept their bad faith,” “hold his faith in his own hand” and “changed their faith”; these do not express the intended idea of accepting or changing one’s circumstances. There are also noticeable spelling and word-form errors, such as “succesful” and “commense.” Build a more precise set of phrases for discussing difficult circumstances, personal agency and practical reasons for accepting or changing a situation.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentences, including a conditional idea beginning “when the people have try and work hard,” but control is limited and errors occur frequently. Verb forms and tense are often inaccurate: “it is good to agreed,” “people thinks,” “they didn't achieved” and “they become” do not maintain correct forms or consistent time reference. Agreement and sentence construction are also problematic, as in “those individuals … who accept their bad faith and also lose their hope to become better who didn't achieved any thing.” Punctuation and spacing are inconsistent, particularly around commas and sentence boundaries. Practise accurate present-tense statements and past-tense forms, and build complex sentences with one clear main clause and a correctly formed subordinate clause.

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