Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-10-29

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

It is an on going debate on whether to accept the bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or bad financial condition or try and escape from such conditions. However, it contains relevant risk of bankruptcy, I believe it is better to take some considerable risk rather than sitting without hope and accept the faith.

To begin with, a segment of society argues that in order to improve such situation contains not only higher financial but also risk of bad prestige in one's corresponding field. As a person may needs to leave his job in order to find an appropriate job according to his interest or needs to be self employed. Additionaly, there is a risk of loosing a safe job just because he finds it not relevent or non satisfactory is a big beed. Although, the salaries are low, one has a secure employment. in addition, job provides him income on regular basis. As a result many just give up their ambition just because of family or social pressure.

On the other hand, some argues that sitting depressed and unsatisfied without trying anything different is useless because one needs to atleast try his best to find an appropriate job which he really admires. Consequently, the job may helps him earn a ransome amount either it is from salary or commision from profit. Additionaly, When a person does a job which he really admire then he tends to do better in his field. For instance, my brother was working for an IT company back in 2020. Though, he was earning a good salary he did not happy with his job. Therefore, he have started a small business and now his mood stays much better and positive then before.

Conclusively, I believe that evenafter it contains some risk, everyone should try to escape from the job which not pay them well or not of their interest. Owing to these reasons everyone should take that initial step atleast for their good future.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You address both views and give a clear opinion: you explain why people may stay in secure but unsatisfying work, then argue that trying to improve one’s circumstances can bring greater satisfaction. The example of your brother’s move from an IT job to a small business supports your position. However, the discussion of accepting a bad situation is less fully developed: the points about financial security and family or social pressure are relevant, but would benefit from a specific example or clearer explanation of when acceptance might be sensible. Your argument also focuses mainly on jobs, with less attention to the prompt’s example of a shortage of money. Develop both sides more evenly and make the reasons behind your conclusion more precise.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a clear overall structure: an introduction, separate paragraphs for the two views, and a conclusion. Signposting such as “To begin with,” “On the other hand,” and “Conclusively” helps readers follow the discussion. However, some links are mechanical, and a few connections between ideas are unclear. For example, the opening of the first body paragraph (“in order to improve such situation contains…”) does not clearly connect the risk to the view being discussed. The sentence beginning “Although, the salaries are low” also shifts abruptly from risk to security. Use clearer topic sentences and make each sentence’s relationship to the previous one explicit. This would strengthen progression and reduce the need to rely on repeated transition phrases.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use a reasonable range of vocabulary for the topic, including “secure employment,” “family or social pressure,” “ambition,” and “appropriate job.” There are also attempts at less common expressions, but several are inaccurate or unnatural, which limits precision: “accept the faith” does not convey accepting one’s circumstances, “bad prestige” is unclear, and “a big beed” appears to be an incorrect word. Spelling and word-form errors such as “loosing,” “relevent,” and “commision” also reduce control. Choose familiar, accurate collocations rather than forcing unusual phrases, and proofread spelling. More precise terms for financial security, job satisfaction, and career change would help express your ideas clearly.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and complex sentence forms, including clauses introduced by “Although,” “because,” and “when,” and the overall meaning is usually understandable. However, errors in verb forms, agreement, articles, and sentence construction occur across the response. Examples include “a person may needs,” “the job may helps,” “he did not happy,” and “he have started”; these should use consistent, correctly formed verbs. There are also incomplete or awkward constructions, such as “in order to improve such situation contains,” and punctuation and capitalisation are inconsistent, as in “employment. in addition” and “Additionally, When.” Review subject–verb agreement, auxiliary verbs, and sentence boundaries, then check each sentence for a complete grammatical structure.

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