Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-10-29

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation and the others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.For me ,sometime i am with the first idea and sometime i am with the second .

I think that the person sometime have a bad times and when you have it you give up in doing many important things .From my perspective , you must analyse the situation that you are in it and focus on what you can do to transform your bad situation to be better , for example : one time , i have a very difficult situation and i just think that it is easy to give up and in the next time i will success and i will recup what i lose but at the end i understand that what you lose probably you lose it forever and for me this is a hard and important lesson .But on the flip side , you must accept some situations to continue your life . One time my uncle told a story about himself , he was working in a very good company but when he begun to think in marriage ,their boss sacked him from the company to put his brother in that work .he told that he think to suicide because he did not accept the situation and he saw that it was very difficult to accept this but he mus accept it.

In conclusion t

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You address both views: you suggest analysing a difficult situation and trying to improve it, but also say some situations must be accepted. The personal examples about your own setback and your uncle’s dismissal are relevant, and the final lesson about accepting what cannot be recovered gives the response a developing viewpoint. However, the position is not consistently clear: “sometime i am with the first idea and sometime i am with the second” does not explain which view you ultimately support. The discussion is also brief and the examples are not fully explained. The response contains 224 words, so it is 26 words below the 250-word minimum; 24 words copied from the task prompt were not counted. Develop both arguments and state a clear overall opinion.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is some organisation: the opening introduces the two views, the body moves from trying to improve circumstances to accepting them, and “In conclusion” signals an ending. Connectors such as “for example” and “on the flip side” also show an attempt to guide the reader. However, the response is presented as one long paragraph, so the two sides and conclusion are not clearly separated. The progression is difficult to follow in places, particularly where the personal setback example shifts into a general lesson without a clear link. The conclusion is unfinished (“In conclusion t”), which leaves the argument without a completed summary. Use separate paragraphs for the introduction, each view, and conclusion, and make references and transitions between ideas more explicit.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use enough vocabulary to communicate the main subject, including “accept,” “improve,” “situation,” “analyse,” and “transform.” Phrases such as “hard and important lesson” and “continue your life” also convey personal meaning. However, the range is limited and some word choices or collocations are inaccurate, which can make parts of the account unclear. For example, “recup what i lose” is not a natural expression, and “think in marriage” does not express the intended idea idiomatically. Repetition of “situation” and “accept” also limits variety. Build a more precise vocabulary for discussing setbacks, choices, and employment, and check spelling and word forms before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentences, including a conditional idea in “when you have it you give up” and a contrast introduced by “but.” This shows some effort to connect clauses rather than relying only on short statements. However, the longer sentences are often difficult to control, and errors in tense, agreement, articles, and sentence boundaries occur frequently. Examples include “the person sometime have,” “when he begun,” and “he think to suicide.” Commas and full stops are also missing or misplaced, especially in the opening and the long account of your uncle. Practise forming accurate past-tense narratives and breaking complex ideas into shorter, correctly punctuated sentences.

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