Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-10-30

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

it is widely argued that people beleived that they accept to stay in bad situtation and not trying to get better with this situtation while other think it is necessery to try and get better situation for themselfes. In this essay disscuss the both situation, I strongly disagree with the situation to stay on bad time.

on the one hand, some people just stay in bad situation like they are umemployed or they have no money for there present or there future.People should try their best to get out if that condition of their life and get out of it for their better future moreover not only for family but also for themselves. Although umemployment or low sallery not only effect on their study,in some situation when someone need medical treatment it also effect on that. Likewise if someone have no money for future and un expected expenses came they can not tackle with that.

they do not give their childer a better future and better life style, they can not have a brighter future.

the main damage which cause is their study.

on the other hand, people said that they have to improve their situation, like they have to find the new job and trying to manage the expenses and save money for their future to get them out of that poor situation.

To sum up,it is waymore better to improve your situation rather than stay on that situation and accept a bad condition,try to improve yourself rather than depand on other

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You give a clear opinion in the introduction, saying you “strongly disagree” with accepting a bad situation, and the conclusion repeats that improving it is preferable. You also mention relevant consequences of unemployment or low income, including medical treatment, unexpected expenses and children’s prospects. However, the discussion is only partial: the view that people may accept difficult circumstances is not explained, and the paragraph beginning “on the other hand” actually describes improving the situation rather than presenting the opposing view. Several points, such as the effect on education, are asserted but not explained with a specific example. To develop the response, explain why someone might accept a situation and then compare that reasoning with your own position.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is a basic essay shape, with an introduction, two body paragraphs signalled by “on the one hand” and “on the other hand,” and a concluding sentence. The ideas about money, medical needs and family are broadly related, so the reader can follow the general topic. However, progression is weak: the second body paragraph repeats the view that people should improve their circumstances instead of presenting the other side, and the short sentence about “the main damage” is not clearly connected to the preceding point. Linking phrases such as “moreover” and “Likewise” are attempted, but relationships between ideas are sometimes unclear. Organise each paragraph around one distinct view, and use clear references and transitions to show how each example supports it.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “unemployed,” “medical treatment,” “unexpected expenses,” “manage the expenses” and “future.” These choices make the general subject understandable. However, the range is limited and several phrases are inaccurate or awkward, such as “stay in bad situation,” “get better situation,” and “the main damage which cause.” Spelling errors—including “beleived,” “necessery,” “sallery” and “childer”—also make the writing less clear and reduce control of vocabulary. Build a bank of accurate phrases for discussing hardship and solutions, and check spelling and word forms carefully. More precise expressions would help you explain the two viewpoints without relying on repeated uses of “situation” and “better.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple sentences and longer structures, for example the sentence beginning “Although umemployment or low sallery…” and the conditional idea “if someone have no money…”. This shows an effort to connect causes and consequences. However, complex sentences are often faulty, and errors in agreement, verb forms, articles and sentence boundaries frequently make the meaning harder to follow. Examples include “people… accept to stay,” “if someone have,” and “they can not tackle with that”; the opening sentence also runs several ideas together without clear punctuation. Practise building accurate subject–verb patterns and complete sentences before adding clauses. For instance, separate the points about medical costs and unexpected expenses, then check each sentence for a clear subject, verb and punctuation.

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