Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-10-31

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Few people agree that acceptance of any bad situation, for instance, job dissatisfaction or financial problems is the way out. While others disagree with this statement and encourages to make the situation better and work on it. I will be discussing both the views and concluding accordingly.

Acceptance of a bad situation sometimes seems logical, if you have nothing in your hands. For instance, job dissatisfaction or shortage of money is something people cannot change immediately. If a person is dissatisfied with the job they might be facing the same situation even if they switch the job because one way or the other, there always is a factor which will make them unsatisfied. Similarly, money shortage is not something they can work overnight to fulfill, it needs years of hard work. So, in most cases there is not much a person can do other than accept their situation.

On the other hand, sitting idle and doing nothing to improve their situation is not the best thing to do. Trying different paths, solutions and alternatives can lead to getting over their current situation. Hypothetically, financial problems or job related issues might somehow fill the gap if we actually work on changing it. Finding better job conditions might not fully satisfy you but atleast it makes you less dissatisfied. Similarly, financial problems can somehow be sorted if the person finds other sources of income which also is a way to improve the situation they are in.

Lastly, there are various unknown factors which might not be in a person's hand and they must accept it, however, acceptance does not mean not working on ourselves in order to improve the situation.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You address both views and give a clear concluding position: acceptance may be necessary when circumstances cannot be changed immediately, but it should not prevent efforts to improve them. The examples of job dissatisfaction and financial difficulty are relevant, and the point that changing jobs may not remove every source of dissatisfaction helps explain the acceptance argument. However, the discussion of improvement is less fully developed: “finding better job conditions” and seeking other income are plausible, but you do not explain how these steps might work or illustrate them with a specific example. Your opening also says you will “conclud[e] accordingly” without stating your position clearly until the final paragraph. Develop the two sides more evenly and make your view explicit from the introduction.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a coherent overall arrangement: an introduction, one paragraph for each view, and a conclusion. The progression from accepting limits to taking action is easy to follow, and signposts such as “On the other hand,” “Similarly,” and “Lastly” help readers track the discussion. This clear structure is a strength. Some linking is mechanical, however, with repeated “Similarly” and “somehow,” and the opening sentence’s contrast between “Few people agree” and “While others disagree” makes the relationship between the views less clear. The final paragraph also introduces the balanced position rather than fully drawing together the preceding points. Use more precise transitions and clearer references, and make the conclusion synthesize the two arguments.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use enough topic-related vocabulary to communicate the main ideas, including “job dissatisfaction,” “shortage of money,” “alternatives,” and “sources of income.” There are also attempts at more specific phrasing, such as “job conditions” and “financial problems.” However, some word choices and collocations are awkward or imprecise: “acceptance … is the way out” does not clearly express the intended idea, “work on changing it” is vague, and “fill the gap” is not a natural fit for improving a situation. Repetition of “situation,” “dissatisfied,” and “somehow” also limits flexibility. Aim for more precise expressions such as “cope with difficult circumstances,” “take steps to improve them,” and “reduce financial pressure,” while checking spelling such as “at least.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, including conditional and subordinate clauses: “if you have nothing in your hands” and “even if they switch the job.” Most sentences remain understandable, and the longer sentences generally communicate the intended relationships. Some grammatical errors persist, though. In the introduction, “others disagree … and encourages” has a subject–verb agreement problem; “I will be discussing both the views” uses an unnecessary article; and “if we actually work on changing it” shifts from the earlier third-person framing to “we.” The sentence beginning “Similarly, financial problems can somehow be sorted” also ends with an unclear clause structure. Review agreement, articles, and consistent pronoun reference, and break up long sentences when their structure becomes difficult to control.

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