Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-11-01

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

It often argue whether it is best to accept a bad situation,like an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money or improve such situation.

Firstly, As a human we should learn how to tolerate each other,and overlook each other mistakes,especially when it comes to profession because no one is perfect,so accepting an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money is something that normally happen to someone as a business person but we shouldnt let that make us a bad person rather we should try to improve.

Secondly, accepting an unsatisfactory job is something that will keep hurting you as long as you remember ,so it is better to say your mind,let the person know you are not pleased with the services they render to you,doing that will help you to forgive the person and also move on,furthermore you are also helping the person to improve on his/her services.

In conclusion,it is not advisable to accept an unsatisfactory job because it will make you to detest the person you gave job.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

You introduce the topic and express a preference against accepting an unsatisfactory situation, but the response only partially addresses the prompt. The discussion of acceptance focuses on tolerating other people’s mistakes and being imperfect, rather than explaining why someone might accept a bad job or financial hardship. The second body paragraph also shifts to dissatisfaction with services and forgiving a person, which is not clearly connected to the examples in the question. Your opinion is present in the conclusion, but it is narrow and supported by little explanation or evidence. The response is 161 words, so it is 89 words below the 250-word minimum; the eight words copied from the prompt are excluded. Develop both views directly and add relevant reasons and examples.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The response has a basic structure, with an opening, two body paragraphs signalled by “Firstly” and “Secondly,” and a conclusion. These markers help the reader identify the stages of your answer. However, the ideas do not progress clearly: the first paragraph moves from tolerating mistakes to jobs and money, while the second turns to services and forgiveness. The relationship between these points and the essay question is therefore difficult to follow. Several sentences also contain many ideas joined by commas, making the connections less clear. Organise each body paragraph around one view from the prompt, explain that view in sequence, and use clearer sentence boundaries and references.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant vocabulary, including “unsatisfactory job,” “shortage of money,” “accepting,” and “improve,” so the topic is generally recognisable. However, the range is limited and several expressions are imprecise or repetitive, which makes parts of the argument difficult to interpret. For example, “say your mind” and “the services they render to you” do not clearly express the intended point in this context, and “detest the person you gave job” is awkward and unclear. Aim for more precise language about employment, financial circumstances, and taking action to change them. Vary repeated words such as “accepting” and “improve,” and check collocations so your meaning is conveyed naturally.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt to connect ideas in longer sentences, for example with “because,” “so,” and “furthermore,” and the overall meaning can usually be understood. However, the range of sentence structures is limited, and long comma-linked sentences make grammatical relationships unclear. There are recurring errors in agreement and sentence formation, as in “It often argue” and “something that normally happen.” Articles and possessives are also inconsistent, as in “As a human” and “each other mistakes.” Capitalisation and punctuation need attention, particularly the capital “As” after the opening comma and missing spaces after commas. Use shorter, complete sentences alongside carefully controlled complex ones, and proofread agreement, articles, and punctuation.

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