Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-11-01

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

There are two school of thoughts,according first concept according to a group of people, simply accept the luck or a bad condition for example a displeasing work or money shortage.Wether everyone else oppose this idealogy that it is far more important to try and try again to change the bad circumstances.I am agree with the second school thoughts that we should not stop attempt a thing repeatively.

Generally,There some humans who assume that either it's a unfulfilling job place or a lack of wealth, it's all due to the luck.They simple hang the white flag without battling against the problems , just move away from them. For example, a person who have lack of skills and want to persude his/her career in better field, what he/she do , he left the thing unsolved instead of putting affect and learning the skills. They think it not worth to burn the mid night for 2 or 3% more salary.

The second school thought, discuss those persons who have firm believe that rather then just talking and thinking, they have to try and do it again if the the result is not according to the expectation.For examlple a student attempting CSS exam again and again he will satisfy hisself/herself.Atlast,they will not have any regret of not attempting or try atleast one time.

In my opinion i prefer to strive again and again with consitstancly,one day you will achieve your level of success.It is always important to start and end things wehter to not. I firmly have faith go ,shot and crack.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address both views and state a clear preference for trying to improve difficult circumstances, especially in the opening and the paragraph beginning “In my opinion.” The examples of someone seeking a better career and a student retaking an exam are relevant. However, the discussion is only partly developed: the reasons for accepting a bad situation are presented mainly as “due to the luck” or not wanting to work for a small salary increase, without explaining when acceptance might be sensible. The argument for persistence is also asserted rather than explored, and the final claim about success is very general. Develop each side with a clearer explanation and show how your examples support your position.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, one paragraph for each view, and a concluding opinion. This helps the reader identify the main stages of your discussion. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes difficult to follow, and links between ideas are often mechanical or unclear. For example, “The second school thought, discuss those persons” does not form a clear transition into the argument, while “Atlast” and “In my opinion” are used without fully connecting the preceding points. Some references, such as “the thing” and “they,” are vague. Use clearer topic sentences, connect each example explicitly to its point, and ensure each paragraph develops one central idea in a logical sequence.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt topic-related vocabulary, including “bad circumstances,” “lack of wealth,” “firm believe,” and “strive,” and the reader can generally identify your intended meaning. However, the range is limited and several inaccurate word choices, collocations, and spellings make parts of the response difficult to interpret. Phrases such as “accept the luck,” “hang the white flag,” and “burn the mid night” are not natural in this context; “putting affect” also obscures your meaning. Repeated use of “try,” “thing,” and “bad” limits precision. Build a bank of natural expressions for discussing hardship and perseverance, and check spelling and collocation before using less familiar phrases.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more extended sentence forms, including a conditional example beginning “if the result is not according to the expectation.” However, control is inconsistent, and errors in sentence construction, agreement, articles, and punctuation frequently make the reader work to understand the message. For instance, “There are two school of thoughts” has a plural-agreement problem, while “There some humans” is missing a verb. In “a person who have lack of skills,” the relative clause and article use are faulty. Several sentences also run together without clear punctuation. Practise building accurate subject–verb–object sentences first, then add subordinate clauses and check each sentence for a complete verb and clear punctuation.

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