Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-11-02

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Some individuals vote for supporting unsatisfaction of jobs and shortage of money while other disagree and hold view that it should be improved. However, the argument varies due to diffrent reasons such as discrimination and development of the country.

On the one hand, the major reason for these supporting the improvement of the situotions is that they belive that it would contribute to the development of their country. When people from same country contribute to the creation of job oppotunities many of thier people may be easily employed and earn thier living rather than depending on one source, also it coutributes to the paying of taxes that enable government to start another budiness and employ other people to run the business.For instance, people from Kenya move to other country to study or to work since they dont support there country to create job employment that earns tax the country to help fund other business. Additonally, it creates discriminatipon. Idividuals may belive to be discriminated by other countries hence find a way to get rid of it.

On the other hand, the reason for those support who support the acceptance of bad situation is that they belive to have no need to way to solve there problem and that technology has taken there role hence the think that struggling for the lost battle maybe unnecessary. For example, Vietnam people think that they wont compete with technology beacuse it has taken their role in busness hence jobless and poor in thier economy.

In nutshell, despite of technology taking place in jobs people in the country should come together to creat jobs that is non thechnological therefore i totally suport the improvement of the situation rather than accepting to get rrid of discrimination and development of the country.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You present a clear preference for improving difficult circumstances in the conclusion, and you attempt to discuss both views. The first body paragraph gives reasons for improvement, including job creation and tax revenue, while the second explains that some people may feel unable to compete with technology. However, the discussion only partly answers the question: the link between discrimination and the views is unclear, and the examples about Kenya and Vietnam are asserted rather than explained. The acceptance side is especially brief and does not explore when accepting a situation might be reasonable. Develop each view with a direct explanation and a relevant, specific example, and state your position more clearly in the introduction as well as the conclusion.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, separate paragraphs beginning “On the one hand” and “On the other hand,” and a concluding paragraph. These markers help readers identify the two sides. However, progression within paragraphs is uneven. In the first body paragraph, job creation, tax, migration and discrimination are introduced without clear links, so the central argument becomes difficult to follow. Phrases such as “For instance” introduce examples, but the Kenya example does not clearly demonstrate the preceding claim. Some linking is also awkward or repetitive, including “On the one hand” and “On the other hand” without a clear transition between the ideas. Organise each paragraph around one main point, then explain and illustrate it before moving on.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt topic-related vocabulary such as “job opportunities,” “taxes,” “technology,” “discriminated” and “development,” showing some ability to discuss employment and economic conditions. However, the range is limited and errors in spelling, word choice and collocation are noticeable, sometimes making meaning difficult to interpret. Examples include “supporting unsatisfaction of jobs,” “job employment,” “taken their role in business” and “get rid of discrimination.” Several words are also repeatedly misspelled, such as “belive,” “situotions” and “thier.” Aim for accurate, natural phrases rather than more ambitious wording: for example, describe people as accepting an unsatisfactory job, say that technology has replaced workers, and refer to creating employment. Proofreading spelling and checking collocations would make your ideas clearer.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You use some longer sentence forms, including a reason clause beginning “since” and a contrast between the two views, but complex sentences are often difficult to control. Errors in agreement, verb forms, articles and sentence boundaries occur frequently. For example, “the reason for those support who support” has an unclear grammatical structure, while “people from same country contribute” is missing an article and “many of thier people may be easily employed” has an awkward passive construction. The sentence beginning “For instance” also runs several ideas together, making the relationships unclear. Use shorter, complete sentences to express each step of your reasoning, then practise combining them with accurate clauses. Check subject–verb agreement, articles and punctuation when editing.

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