Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-11-03

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

We are living in a rapidly changing world, sometime people face many obstacal in their life such as, uncertainity of money or unsatifaction of job this type of problem becoming common due to low employment rate whereas, other pepole are try to their best to improve this kind of situation. I discuss respectively both views in given below paragraph.

On the one hand, Some people have good marks and high qualification in particular field. Although, they can't pass or eligble for the job due to lack of skills and knowlege of work. However, they grab the job to do hardwork at that time after they are focusing on the particular role and try to hard to get higher position soon. But India has low employment rate so many people not satisfied to their job. Sometimes many people are deported or fired from the job due to more people are work in same field. So people must be tried to get job on differenct area.

On the other hand, People who have abilities to grab the high level job using their skills and knowlege they can altimately grab the job soon. But somehow people have face problems in their life and they must be tried hard to come out and improve the situation. People continueous try to achieve the role or job in their field.

In conclusion, i support the second view due to hardwork to find out better situation and improve lifestyle. If people not to able the hardwork in competitive world altimately they find the unsatisfaction of job and shortage of money. Thus, follow the some rules and maintane disipline in life to achieve and improve good situation.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You state a position in the conclusion—“I support the second view”—and refer to both accepting a difficult situation and trying to improve it. However, the discussion only partially addresses the question. The first body paragraph mainly describes qualifications, skills, and job competition, while the second largely repeats that people should work hard; neither clearly explains why someone might accept a bad situation or develops the advantages of either view. The examples about low employment and being fired are relevant, but their connection to the two perspectives is not made clear. To strengthen the response, explain the reasons behind each view, support them with a specific example, and maintain a clear distinction between accepting circumstances and taking action to change them.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has an introduction, two body paragraphs, and a conclusion, and the phrases “On the one hand” and “On the other hand” signal an intended comparison. However, the ideas do not progress clearly within this structure: the first body paragraph moves from qualifications to job performance and then employment rates, and the second repeats the idea of trying hard without adding a distinct point. Some linking words, including “Although” and “However,” do not show clear relationships between the clauses they connect. The opening also promises to discuss both views, but the paragraphs do not consistently follow that plan. Give each body paragraph one clear purpose, order its supporting points logically, and use linking expressions only where their meaning fits.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some vocabulary relevant to employment and personal circumstances, including “low employment rate,” “higher position,” “competitive world,” and “improve lifestyle.” This gives the response a basic range for the topic. However, the range is limited and several spelling and word-choice errors make parts difficult to understand, such as “obstacal,” “unsatifaction,” “eligble,” and “altimately.” Some combinations are also unnatural, including “grab the job” and “try to hard.” Choose more precise, conventional expressions and check spelling carefully. For example, “secure a job” and “make a sustained effort” would communicate your ideas more naturally and help reduce repetition of “job,” “people,” and “hardwork.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including a contrast with “Although” and a conditional sentence beginning “If people…”. However, complex structures are often faulty, and frequent errors sometimes make the intended meaning unclear. For example, “Some people have good marks and high qualification” has problems with number agreement, while “people not satisfied to their job” lacks a correctly formed verb and uses an incorrect grammatical pattern. The opening sentence also joins several ideas without clear sentence boundaries. Practise building accurate subject–verb–object sentences first, then add subordinate clauses with correct verb forms and punctuation. Reading each sentence aloud and checking that every clause has a subject and a finite verb would help.

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