Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-11-04

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Some people think it is better to accept a bad situation like an unsatisfactory job or less money. Others think it is better to improve the situation. In my opinion the lack of money and unsatisfactory jobs are not better for humans because their is a lot of stressed of company and they required nine houes to in office and give very low salary so i think this is better to try some new and improve such situation.

Furthermore if we do something better than our past we reduce our stress and anxietry and physcially strong. Mostly people do jobs which is not related to their field. As far as i know man can do that of job an busniess in which they interested and easily confortable work.In addition the field jobs does not matterhow long and low salary but the work which their is stressless and comfortable.

Moreover the job which we do are stressful we should exist no matter thhe company loss we should take care of our health first than work and if u are no interested no matter how good salary are should leave and the main thing is office enviroment its totally depend upon the employes.If the society is good you must change.

The most vital point is that if u woried and change about society enviroment so this is impossible to change you just only focus on your interest.

In Conclusion, the only thing you can do whatever u want just focus on your interest because the work which you like to do its confortable and benefical for you.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You give a clear general preference for trying to improve a difficult situation, especially when you say people should focus on work they are interested in and protect their health. However, the response only partially discusses the two views. The case for accepting a bad situation is not explained as a genuine viewpoint; the paragraph about stressful work mainly argues that people should leave it. Reasons such as financial security, family responsibilities, or limited job opportunities could explain why some people choose acceptance. Your own position is present, but it shifts between changing jobs, improving the workplace, and focusing on personal interests, and these ideas need clearer development and relevant examples.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is some paragraphing, and linking expressions such as “Furthermore,” “Moreover,” and “In Conclusion” show an attempt to organise the response. However, the overall progression is difficult to follow because several paragraphs repeat the recommendation to leave stressful work or pursue personal interests without clearly developing separate points. The discussion of accepting a bad situation is not given its own clear place, and the relationship between changing a job and changing the wider “society environment” is unclear. Some connections are also awkward, as in “If the society is good you must change.” Organise the essay around the two views and then your opinion, using each paragraph to develop one distinct idea with clear references.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

Your vocabulary is basic but includes some relevant terms, such as “salary,” “stress,” “health,” and “office environment,” so the main topic is generally recognisable. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations make meaning difficult to interpret. For example, “a lot of stressed of company,” “exist no matter the company loss,” and “the field jobs does not matterhow long” are not natural or clear expressions. Spelling errors such as “anxietry,” “physcially,” and “confortable” also reduce accuracy. Build a more precise set of phrases for discussing employment and financial pressure, and check spelling and word forms carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentence forms, including clauses beginning with “because,” “if,” and “which.” This gives the response some structural variety, and the main preference can usually be understood. However, control is inconsistent, particularly in longer sentences. Examples include “their is a lot of stressed … and they required nine houes,” where agreement and verb forms are faulty, and “if u are no interested no matter how good salary are should leave,” where the clause structure is incomplete. Articles, plurals, and punctuation also need attention. Use shorter, complete sentences when expressing complex ideas, then practise combining them with accurate subordinate clauses.

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