Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-11-05

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

These days it generally believed that, people can accept to live in bad condation rather then working in the unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. However, In my opinion i find more advantages than a disadvantages. In this essay i will attempt to present some views and a few opinion aspects of this statements.

The foremost argunment to justify my stand is that; In modern period some people believe that they can accepts the bad situation in their life. For instance, By doing like this they can learn about the tuff situation which an be make them well developed in future. It can be greatly beneficial to individuals and the society. Futhermore, It should also be noted that by acceot bad situtation make people more well organized their life in the future. For example, youngers make them self more rude, selfish, and hyelped then to control their emotion in front of people as well as it makes children more mature in their life.

Secondaly, In my opinion such as aun unsatisfactory job or shortage of money make people life more unperiodtable because of that people can suffer from more financial condition and make them more dispointed by their unmsatisfactory job. Moreover, If younger work where they well not satifaction make problem in jobs sector for example, it make less progess on business, marketing as well as damage in their own personal life also. However, The governent should take action on this things and make more progess on people satifaction jobs and provide a opportunities for public with nice amount of money.

In conclusion, I believe that people can accept bad situation than doing the job of unsatisfactory or shortage of money because it refers people to do better in future. It hepls people by diffrent ways like make themself more strong, mature in life amd more other.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You attempt to discuss acceptance and improvement, and your view is most apparent in the conclusion: you believe accepting hardship can make people stronger and more mature. However, the response does not fully address both sides of the question. The first body paragraph mainly explains possible benefits of accepting a difficult situation, while the second focuses on the harms of an unsatisfactory job or low income and calls for government action; it does not clearly explain how individuals might try to improve their circumstances. Several supporting points, such as becoming “rude, selfish” or more mature, are unclear or insufficiently explained. State your position consistently and develop each view with a clear reason and a relevant example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has an introduction, two body paragraphs and a conclusion, and signposts such as “Furthermore,” “Secondly” and “In conclusion” show an attempt to guide the reader. However, the progression between ideas is not consistently clear. The first paragraph moves from learning through hardship to becoming organised, then to children’s behaviour, without explaining how these points connect. The second paragraph shifts from personal dissatisfaction to business effects and government action. Some linking phrases are used mechanically, and references such as “this things” do not clearly identify what they refer to. Give each paragraph one main purpose, order its supporting points logically, and use linking expressions only where they clarify the relationship between ideas.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You attempt vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “unsatisfactory job,” “financial condition,” “society” and “control their emotion.” However, the range is limited and many spelling and word-choice errors make parts difficult to understand, for example “condation,” “unperiodtable,” “dispointed” and “satifaction jobs.” Some combinations are also unnatural, such as “make people life” and “nice amount of money.” These errors sometimes obscure the intended meaning, particularly in the examples about young people. Build a reliable set of topic vocabulary and check spelling, word forms and collocations. Prefer clear, accurate expressions over ambitious wording that does not fit the sentence.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You try to use both simple and more complex sentence forms, including clauses introduced by “because,” “which” and “if.” Nevertheless, errors are frequent, and some sentences are difficult to follow. Examples include “These days it generally believed” (missing a subject and auxiliary), “people can accepts” (incorrect verb form), and “by acceot bad situtation make people” (an incomplete and poorly formed clause). There are also problems with articles, agreement, sentence boundaries and capitalisation, as in “In my opinion i.” Practise building accurate basic sentences first, then add subordinate clauses. Check that each sentence has a clear subject and verb, and review verb forms and punctuation before submitting.

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