Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart shows the typical weekday for students in three different countries.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

the y-axis shows the numbers of hours from 0 to 14 and the x-axis shows us the studying sleeping and relaxing times of student in 3 different countries the main thing comparison between these three things the studying time in japan has the highest value in bar graph and its shows the lowes time in relaxing thats why the technology in japan is so advanced as compared to the other countries its sleeping time is 7 hours so thats enough for a human to complete their sleep the study time in uk is about 8.5 and its is rather far less than the japan and its relaxing time is about to 7 hours now we will make comparison between the relaxing time of uk and germany it is same in both of the countries but in japan its almost the half of the other two countries and the difference between the studying time in uk and Germany is 1 hour so its all about the comparison of this bar chart.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify several relevant comparisons, including Japan’s highest study figure (13 hours), its lowest relaxation figure (4), and the equal relaxation times in the UK and Germany (7 each). However, the response only partially summarises the chart: it gives no clear overall overview of the main pattern across all three activities and countries, and it omits important figures such as Germany’s 9 hours of study and the UK’s 8.5 hours of sleep. The claim that Japan’s technology is advanced because students study more is unsupported by the chart and should be removed. Focus on reporting what the data shows, with a concise overview and accurate comparisons, rather than adding explanations the visual cannot establish.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is some organisation: you introduce the axes, then discuss studying and relaxing, and use phrases such as “now we will make comparison” to signal a shift. However, the response reads largely as one continuous sequence, with no clear paragraphing or overall progression from an overview to selected details. Linking phrases are repetitive and sometimes make the writing sound like a spoken explanation rather than a report. References such as “these three things” and “its” are not always clear, so readers must infer which country or activity you mean. Group the information into an introduction and overview, followed by logically organised comparisons, and use precise references such as “Japan’s study figure” or “the UK and Germany.”

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

Your vocabulary is sufficient to identify the chart’s categories and make basic comparisons, using terms such as “highest,” “lowest,” “difference,” and “comparison.” However, the range is limited and several phrases are inaccurate or awkward, including “the main thing comparison,” “the lowes time,” and “its sleeping time.” The response also uses conversational wording such as “now we will make comparison” and an unsupported phrase about “technology,” which is not appropriate for describing this chart. Aim for precise data-reporting language and accurate collocations. For example, describe a figure as “hours spent studying” and say that one value is “lower than” another, rather than relying on repeated general terms such as “time” and “comparison.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt to connect ideas in longer sentences, for example when comparing relaxation in the three countries, but the range of sentence structures is limited and these longer attempts are often faulty. Errors include missing or incorrect articles and agreement in “the study time in uk … its is,” as well as unclear sentence boundaries where several ideas run together. Capitalisation and punctuation are also inconsistent, making the relationships between clauses harder to follow. Use shorter, complete sentences to report each comparison, and check subject–verb agreement, articles, and punctuation. A clearer pattern would be: “Japan’s students study for 13 hours, compared with 8 hours in the UK and 9 in Germany.”

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