Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.5 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-07-28
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The bar chart shows the typical weekday for students in three different countries.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 6.5)
The bar chart provides information about the typical weekday for students in United Kingdom, Japan and Germany
Overall, Japan has highest proportion in studying and lowest proportion in relaxing. While, United Kingdom has highest proportion in sleeping as compared to other countries. United Kingdom and Germany has similar ratio in relaxing
On the one hand, students of Japan has more interest in studying which is 13% in typical weekday. It is the highest proportion as compared to other countries. While , United Kingdom and Germany have 8% and 9% respectively in studying. In addition, United Kingdom has highest percentage in sleeping which is 8.5%. And in the countries like Japan and Germany the sleeping percentage is 7% and 8% respectively.
On the second hand , in Japan students spend less time on relaxing which proportion is 4%. However,the students of country United Kingdom and Germany has similar ratio which is 7% in the typical weekday.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 6.0 |
| Overall | 6.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5
The response addresses the task by identifying the main features of the bar chart. You have successfully selected and reported the key data points for studying, sleeping, and relaxing across the three countries. However, the analysis is somewhat mechanical, listing figures rather than synthesising them into a cohesive narrative. To reach a higher band, ensure you provide a more analytical overview that highlights the most significant trends or contrasts rather than just stating individual percentages. While all parts of the task are addressed, the development of the comparisons could be more sophisticated to better reflect the relationships between the data sets.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5
The response is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. You use some cohesive devices such as 'On the one hand' and 'However', though these are sometimes used incorrectly (e.g., 'On the second hand' is not standard English). The flow between sentences is occasionally disjointed, and the referencing is sometimes repetitive. To improve, focus on using a wider variety of linking words and ensure that your paragraphing logically separates the different categories of data. Improving the transition between your overview and the body paragraphs will also enhance the overall coherence of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.5
Your vocabulary is adequate for the task, allowing you to convey the necessary information clearly. You use terms like 'proportion', 'percentage', and 'respectively' correctly, which is positive. However, the range is somewhat limited, and there are instances of awkward phrasing, such as 'has highest proportion in studying' instead of 'has the highest proportion of time spent studying'. To achieve a higher score, try to incorporate more varied vocabulary related to data description, such as 'allocate', 'devote', or 'account for', and ensure you use articles (a/an/the) consistently before nouns to improve the naturalness of your expression.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that affect the precision of your writing. Common issues include missing articles (e.g., 'in United Kingdom'), subject-verb agreement errors (e.g., 'students of Japan has'), and punctuation mistakes, such as the unnecessary space before the comma in 'While ,'. While these errors do not prevent the reader from understanding your meaning, they are frequent enough to limit your score. Focusing on basic grammatical accuracy—specifically articles, pluralisation, and subject-verb agreement—will significantly improve the quality of your work.
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