Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-08-06

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart shows the typical weekday for students in three different countries.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The graph indicates the weekdays for students in three different places.

Most people in the UK spend most of their time catching up the sleep they lost at night or any other

time. The students that slept in that period of time comprised of 8.5 %. Moreover, the ones that focused a lot on studying in Britain were 8 percent. Furthermore, the fraction of students that spent their time relaxing on these days contributed to 7%.

Secondly, Japan has a lot of students which are highly disciplined and contribute to its country's economy. From these students most of which spent part of their time in sleeping about 7%. Next, learners who study most of their weekdays are 13% which indicates that they are more hard working than the British or Germans. In addition, the Japanese individuals who take breaks are very

uncommon about 4%.

Germany has pupils who spent most of their moments in napping about 8% which is indicated by a sky blue bar chart, Red indicates reading or studying which is demonstrated by a fraction of 9 percent and resting period presented by a number of 7.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response attempts to summarize the data but fails to provide a clear overview or identify significant trends. The information is presented as a list of isolated data points rather than a comparative analysis. For instance, the report mentions specific percentages for each country but fails to synthesize these into a meaningful summary of the 'typical weekday'. Furthermore, the data interpretation is inconsistent; the percentages provided do not clearly relate to the visual representation of a 'typical weekday' (e.g., 24 hours), and the lack of a concluding summary or synthesis of the main features limits the score. To improve, you should group data by category (e.g., studying vs. sleeping) and highlight the most striking differences between the three countries.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the progression of ideas is mechanical. While cohesive devices like 'Moreover', 'Furthermore', and 'Secondly' are used, they often feel forced or are used to introduce simple lists of data rather than to build a logical argument or comparison. Referencing is sometimes unclear, such as the phrase 'the ones that focused a lot on studying', which lacks a clear antecedent. Paragraphing is present, but the internal structure of the paragraphs is weak, as they lack a clear topic sentence that summarizes the data for each country. Improving the flow between sentences and ensuring that comparisons are explicitly stated would enhance the coherence.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks the precision required for higher bands. There is some repetition of basic verbs like 'spent' and 'contribute'. Phrases such as 'catching up the sleep they lost' and 'most of their moments in napping' are slightly unnatural in an academic context. While the student attempts to use some descriptive language, the word choices are often imprecise. To achieve a higher score, you should focus on using more academic collocations and varied terminology to describe statistical data, such as 'account for', 'represent', or 'a significant proportion'.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors. Examples include 'The students that slept in that period of time comprised of 8.5 %' (incorrect preposition usage) and 'most of which spent part of their time in sleeping about 7%' (fragmented structure). There are also issues with subject-verb agreement and article usage. While the meaning is generally clear, the frequency of these errors prevents the writing from reaching a higher band. Focusing on sentence construction and proofreading for basic grammatical accuracy would be highly beneficial.

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