Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-08-09

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart shows the typical weekday for students in three different countries.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The bar graph compares the typical weekdays for students in three different nations. The data is calibrated in numbers.

Overall, as is observed, students from Japan have highest interest towards studying, whereas they are least attracted by relaxation.

In UK, the majority of time spent by students is on sleeping which is 8.5 and this is the highest in whole graph in sleeping. However, it shows a related trend towards studying with number 8, whereas they spent least time in relaxing with the number of 7. Moreover, Japan students have intermediate focus on sleeping which is 7 and relaxation has lower influence on these students with number 4 and it is the lowest number in the whole discussion.

Moving to the rest of the description, Germany plays a balanced role in all aspects like the difference between each aspect is only of 1 number. Sleeping with 8 number and studying with 9 are attracting students toward itself, while students are giving less time on relaxing in Germany.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

You have successfully identified the main features of the bar chart and made relevant comparisons between the three countries. However, the response lacks precision in reporting the data. For instance, you refer to 'number 8' or 'number 7' without specifying the unit of measurement (hours). Additionally, the description of the data is sometimes confusing, such as stating Germany has a 'balanced role' while describing the differences as 'only of 1 number'. To reach a higher band, ensure that you clearly label the data points and provide a more accurate summary of the trends rather than listing figures in a way that obscures the overall comparison.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The response is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. You use some cohesive devices like 'Overall', 'However', and 'Moving to', which provide a basic framework. However, the progression of ideas is sometimes disjointed. For example, the transition between the UK and Japan is abrupt, and the referencing is occasionally unclear, such as 'these students' or 'the rest of the description'. To improve, focus on using a wider range of cohesive devices to link sentences more fluidly and ensure that your paragraphing reflects a clear logical progression of the data points.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

Your vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, but it is somewhat repetitive and lacks the precision required for academic reporting. Phrases like 'number 8' or 'number 7' are not appropriate for describing statistical data; you should use terms like 'eight hours' or 'a figure of eight'. There are also some awkward collocations, such as 'highest interest towards studying' and 'attracting students toward itself'. To improve, focus on using more precise academic vocabulary related to trends, such as 'proportion', 'allocated', 'spent', and 'significant', and ensure you use the correct units of measurement when discussing data.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

You demonstrate a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Examples include 'Japan students have intermediate focus' (missing article), 'the majority of time spent by students is on sleeping which is 8.5' (awkward phrasing), and 'Germany plays a balanced role in all aspects like the difference between each aspect is only of 1 number' (run-on sentence with unclear meaning). To improve, focus on subject-verb agreement, the correct use of articles, and ensuring that your complex sentences are punctuated correctly to avoid confusion.

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