Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-08-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart shows the typical weekday for students in three different countries.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The bar chart illustrates the data about three different countries(UK,Japan and Germany) regarding sleeping, studying and relaxing from Monday to Friday.

It is seen that Japan has the highest studying ratio while it falls in relaxing.On the other hand, UK and Germany have the greatest proportion of sleeping while they have little in relaxing.

UK has 8.5 ratio in the aspect of sleeping and has miniature percentage in studying as compared to sleeping.However,UK has also the lowest ratio in relaxing.Japan reaches a significant peek value with respect to studying whereas it falls down in relaxing but give more time for sleeping as compared to relaxing.

Germany prefers to give abundant time on studying as similar to Japan.Nevertheless,sleeping takes 8 hours in other words 10 percent of people of Germany spend their life in sleeping while only 7 hours are fixed for relaxing.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the score. While you have identified the main features of the chart, the analysis is somewhat superficial. You mention '8.5 ratio' and '10 percent', but these figures are not clearly contextualised or compared effectively across the three countries. The overview is present but lacks the necessary depth to fully highlight the key trends. To improve, ensure you provide a more comprehensive summary of the data and ensure you meet the minimum length requirement to allow for a full development of your points.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organised into paragraphs, but the logical progression is hindered by the brevity of the text. While you use some cohesive devices like 'On the other hand' and 'However', the flow between sentences is occasionally disjointed. The referencing is sometimes unclear, such as when you mention '10 percent of people of Germany spend their life in sleeping', which is a misinterpretation of the data provided in the chart. Improving the logical flow and ensuring that each paragraph has a clear focus would help improve the overall coherence of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

Your vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, but it lacks the precision required for a higher band. You use terms like 'ratio' and 'percentage' somewhat inaccurately when describing the data. There are also some awkward collocations, such as 'significant peek value' (should be 'peak') and 'falls in relaxing'. To achieve a higher score, try to use more varied and precise vocabulary to describe trends, such as 'proportion', 'fluctuation', or 'a substantial amount of time', and ensure you are using terms correctly in the context of statistical data.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. For example, 'Japan has the highest studying ratio while it falls in relaxing' is grammatically awkward. There are also issues with article usage and subject-verb agreement, such as 'give more time for sleeping' and 'Germany prefers to give abundant time on studying'. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction and proofreading for common errors in tense and preposition usage to ensure your meaning is conveyed accurately.

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