Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-08-16

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart shows the typical weekday for students in three different countries.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

he data demonstrates that how pupils from the UK, Japan and Germany spend their weekdays by doing these three activities sleeping, studying, and relaxing.

Overall, the most striking point is regarding students in Japan where they do the most studying. While UK learners do all three activities modestly on weekdays. However, the German students also prefer to study. Whilst, throughout the whole graph relaxing is the least preferred activity as compared with the other two.

Firstly, as compared to other nations' students Japan students were doing studies almost touching the top 13 pupils, whereas only 7 do sleeping and 4 are relaxing. After that, the Germany is the second highest where 9 pupils prefer to give time on their studies 8 is sleeping and 7 relaxing.

In contrast, the UK is on an average for all three activities where 8.5 students are preferred to sleep more while 8 is doing study and the least one is relaxing.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response identifies the main features of the bar chart, such as the high study hours in Japan and the distribution of activities in the UK and Germany. However, the report lacks precision in data reporting. For instance, referring to '13 pupils' or '9 pupils' is inaccurate as the chart likely represents hours or a different unit, and the interpretation of the data is somewhat confused. The overview is present but could be more clearly integrated. To improve, ensure you accurately interpret the units provided in the graph and avoid making assumptions about the data that are not explicitly supported by the visual information.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or misused, such as the awkward transition 'Whilst, throughout the whole graph' and the repetitive use of 'Firstly' and 'After that'. The progression of ideas is sometimes disjointed, particularly in the transition between the overview and the body paragraphs. Improving the variety and accuracy of linking words (e.g., 'in contrast', 'furthermore', 'consequently') would significantly enhance the flow and logical progression of the report.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is generally limited and repetitive. Phrases like 'doing studies' and 'give time on their studies' are unnatural and imprecise. There is an attempt to use some descriptive language, but it lacks the sophistication required for higher bands. The student relies on basic terminology to describe the data. To reach a higher band, focus on using more precise academic collocations and synonyms to describe trends and comparisons, such as 'allocate time', 'predominant activity', or 'a significant proportion'.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Examples include 'the data demonstrates that how pupils', 'the Germany is the second highest', and '8.5 students are preferred to sleep'. There is a lack of control over sentence structure, with many sentences being either fragments or poorly constructed. While there is an attempt at complex sentences, they are often inaccurate. To improve, focus on basic subject-verb agreement, correct article usage, and ensuring that sentence structures are grammatically sound before attempting more complex forms.

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