Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-08-17
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The bar chart shows the typical weekday for students in three different countries.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The given bar graph show the information about weekends for students of three different countries such as UK, Japan and Germany.
The bar graph illustrates the proportion of three various country to begin with, UK 8.5 % students spend their time in sleeping. After that 8% of students like to do study and 7% students like to spend their time for relax. In Japan 7% pupils spend their time during sleep. and 13% students like to do study preparation it is higher percentage of students to compare other two countries. and less pupils interested to do some relax activities.
In Germany 8% students felt that sleeping is essential therefore they like to did and 9% students are more interested in study rather than sleeping and relaxing and 7% people like to do some relax kind of activities.
Overall, Japanese students are more enthusiastic to do study and they spend less time for relaxing activities.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses the task by summarizing the provided data, but it fails to accurately report the figures. For instance, the prompt refers to a 'weekday', but you incorrectly refer to 'weekends'. Furthermore, the data interpretation is inconsistent; you mention '8.5% students' for the UK, but the chart likely displays different units or values that are not clearly interpreted. The overview is present but lacks a clear summary of the most significant trends across all categories. To improve, ensure you carefully read the prompt and accurately transcribe the data points provided in the visual aid, focusing on clear comparisons rather than listing individual figures.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate, such as 'After that' and 'to compare other two countries'. The progression of ideas is somewhat disjointed, particularly in the transition between the UK and Japan sections. While there is an attempt at an overall summary at the end, the logical flow between sentences is frequently interrupted by awkward phrasing and repetitive sentence structures. Improving the use of linking words like 'In contrast', 'Similarly', or 'Furthermore' would enhance the flow.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and repetitive, relying heavily on basic phrases like 'spend their time' and 'like to do'. There are several instances of awkward word choices, such as 'study preparation' and 'relax kind of activities', which do not sound natural in an academic context. Additionally, there are errors in word formation, such as 'enthusiastic to do study' instead of 'enthusiastic about studying'. To reach a higher band, you should aim to use a wider range of precise vocabulary related to data description, such as 'proportion', 'allocate', 'predominant', or 'minimal'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Examples include 'The given bar graph show' (subject-verb agreement), 'proportion of three various country' (pluralization), and 'they like to did' (incorrect verb tense). The sentence structures are mostly simple, and attempts at more complex sentences often result in errors. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with misplaced periods and capitalization issues. To improve, focus on mastering basic subject-verb agreement, consistent verb tenses, and ensuring that your sentences are complete and correctly punctuated.
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