Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-08-22
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The bar chart shows the typical weekday for students in three different countries.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
in different three countries, this bar chart shows the typical weekday for students.
firstly we describe the weekday for students in uk,the sleeping rate in uk is 8.5,studying rate is 8 and relaxing rate is 7 .basically the higher rate in uk is studing rate and the lowest rate is relaxing rate .
And the studying rate in japan is 13 hours,7 hours sleeping rate and only 4 hours for relaxing rate.
on the other hand, the studying rate in germany is 9 hours,sleeping hours is 8 and realxing rate is 7.
in conclusion germany rate is the best for the students beacuse the managing process is great.and thats why gemany unversities is topest merit rate. and then second japan and the last developing country are uk.uk taking many fees to students and then contry work .it has weak econimcs growth .in least japan is better for study then uk.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to meet the requirements of an Academic Task 1 report. Instead of providing an objective summary of the data, you have included subjective opinions and external information not present in the chart, such as claims about university rankings, tuition fees, and economic growth. The task requires you to report and compare the data provided, not to evaluate or judge the countries. Furthermore, the overview is missing; a successful response must identify the main trends or significant differences between the countries. Because you have introduced irrelevant personal commentary and failed to provide an objective summary, the response does not adequately address the task requirements.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The response lacks a clear logical structure. While there is an attempt to group information by country, the lack of proper paragraphing and the inclusion of a conclusion that focuses on subjective opinion rather than data synthesis disrupts the flow. Cohesive devices are either missing or used incorrectly, such as the repetitive use of 'rate' and 'and then'. The transition between the data description and the final paragraph is abrupt, and the overall progression of ideas is hindered by the lack of a clear introduction and overview. To improve, ensure each paragraph has a clear focus and use linking words to connect ideas logically.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and repetitive, relying heavily on the word 'rate' to describe hours spent on activities. There are several spelling errors, such as 'studing', 'realxing', 'beacuse', 'unversities', 'topest', and 'econimcs'. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to convey the information with precision. To reach a higher band, you should avoid repeating the same words and instead use a variety of synonyms and collocations related to data reporting, such as 'allocate time to', 'the majority of time is spent', or 'a significant proportion'. Additionally, ensure you proofread your work to eliminate basic spelling mistakes.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. There are issues with sentence structure, such as fragments and run-on sentences (e.g., 'in conclusion germany rate is the best...'). Punctuation is inconsistent, with missing spaces after commas and periods. The use of articles is also problematic, such as 'in different three countries' instead of 'in three different countries'. While there is an attempt to use simple sentences, the lack of complex structures and the high frequency of errors in basic grammar mean that the control of language is limited. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and proper sentence construction will help improve your accuracy.
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