Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-08-22

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart shows the typical weekday for students in three different countries.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The bar graph depicts the details about working days for students in three dissimilar nations which is UK, Japan, and Germany.

Overall, it is clearly shown in the diagram most of the students prefer to do study in Japan which is the higher value. Lower value is in also Japan but they typically Relaxing in weekdays.

Adding the information of the graph where the student in different country are doing different activities which is sleeping, studying, and relaxing. Taking the detail of UK where the mostly scholars are favour in sleeping with the value 8.5 that followed by studying which is 8 and further followed by relaxing the number of 7. In Germany count of students are same like as UK in relaxing field with 7. The negligible difference has been witness in UK and Germany with the count of 8.5 and 8. Student doing studying in Germany with the value 9.

Considering the information of Japan where regular day cycle students pay more attantion on studying with the value of 13 which is substantial count in the graph. Having a sleeping with the count of 7 and most lower in Japan and graph that relaxing with the 4.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response covers the main features of the bar chart, including the three countries and the three activities. However, the analysis is somewhat superficial and lacks a clear, cohesive overview. While you identified that Japan has the highest value for studying, the comparison between countries is often disjointed. For instance, the description of the UK and Germany is repetitive and lacks a clear comparative structure. To improve, ensure you group data logically—perhaps by activity or by country—and provide a more analytical summary that highlights the most significant differences and similarities rather than just listing individual data points.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is organised into paragraphs, but the progression of ideas is often unclear. The use of cohesive devices is mechanical and sometimes inaccurate, such as 'Taking the detail of UK' or 'Considering the information of Japan'. These transitions feel forced and do not effectively link the sentences. Additionally, the referencing is occasionally confusing, making it difficult for the reader to follow the comparison between the three countries. Improving the use of linking words (e.g., 'in contrast', 'similarly', 'whereas') and ensuring each paragraph has a clear topic sentence would significantly enhance the flow of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is limited and often repetitive. You frequently use 'value' and 'count' to describe the data, which becomes monotonous. There are also issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'dissimilar nations', 'mostly scholars', and 'regular day cycle'. Some phrases are non-standard, which hinders the precision of your report. To reach a higher band, you should aim to use a wider range of vocabulary to describe trends and comparisons, such as 'proportion', 'figure', 'allocate time to', or 'surpass'. Focus on using words that are appropriate for an academic report.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, including issues with articles ('the UK', 'the Japan'), subject-verb agreement ('student in different country are'), and sentence structure ('Lower value is in also Japan but they typically Relaxing in weekdays'). The range of structures is limited, relying mostly on simple sentences. While the meaning is generally understandable, the high frequency of errors in basic grammar and punctuation requires attention. You should focus on mastering basic sentence construction and proofreading for common errors like missing articles and incorrect verb forms before attempting more complex structures.

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